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aprilrain 10-03-2007 05:44 AM

Contest Results l Non-Fic l How-To (Sept 2007)
 
Congratulations to Queen of Wands who was able to give us detailed instructions on how to be a grumpy old lady. We appreciate the lesson and, of course, the laughter. Thanks to all of our entrants for some entertaining and informative pieces.

Queen of Wands 18.5
writing kim 15.9
puresnow 15.3

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Originally Posted by aprilrain (Post 109944)
Member: Queen of Wands
Title: How to Be A Grumpy Old Lady

Spelling/Grammar: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall: 9.5/10

Score: 18.5/20

Humor isn’t as easy as it looks, but you are a master! Every tip brought a smile, if not an outright laugh. Clever and an easy read.
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Member: puresnow
Title: How to keep a pet pig

Spelling/Grammar: 3.5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall: 8/10

Score: 15.5/20

Aside from being a little tongue-in-cheek, I thought this was a serious piece until the “out of bounds” signs. From there, it became quite amusing. Not sure what to make of it, but I enjoyed it nonetheless.
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Member: writing kim
Title: How to talk to the dead

Spelling/Grammar: 4/5
Intangibles: 4.5/5
Overall: 8.5/10

Score: 17/20

“Possession can be an unpleasant business.” Haha! I enjoyed the light spin on what could have been a darker topic. You definitely took some liberties, but I liked your perspective.

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Originally Posted by BreezyWriter (Post 110385)
Member: Queen of Wands
Title:
How to Be A Grumpy Old Lady

Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression:10/10

Comments: Nice, humorous, nice intro, loved the part about; shouldering the burden of guilt.
Score: 17/20
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Member: puresnow
Title:
How to keep a pet pig
Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression:9 /10

Comments: Interesting. I liked the fact that there are different types. Though there seems to be lacking of some information. Like where the pig sleeps, taking walks, can it be taught to do it’s business at appropriate places. Ex.: newspaper, ask to go outdoors. Vet help, like what type(s) of vacines are needed.
Score: 16/20
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Member: writing kim
Title:
How to talk to the dead

Mechanics: 5/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 9/10

Comments: Nice stance and somewhat informative long sentences. Loved the ending.
Score: 18 /20

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Originally Posted by Mridula (Post 110461)
Member: Queen of Wands
Title: How to be a Grumpy Old Lady

Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 10/10
Comments: Ah, another hilarious read! You’re beginning to make this a habit, Queen. I laughed every moment of it. Excellent.

Score: 19.5/20
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Member: puresnow
Title: How to keep a pet pig

Mechanics: 3.5/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10
Comments: I wasn’t too sure what the point you were trying to make was, but I enjoyed reading this nonetheless. There were a couple of typos here and there, but overall, a good read.

Score: 15/20
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Member: writing kim
Title: How to talk to the dead

Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: Hilarious read! I loved the way you made everything sound so serious, but so funny.

Score: 17/20
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Originally Posted by Cordatus (Post 110474)
Member: Queen of Wands
Title: How to Be A Grumpy Old Lady

Mechanics: 5/5
Intagibles: 5/5
Overall Impression: 9/10

Comments: Excellent writing! The piece combines a clever writing technique and a facetious, witty style.

Score: 19/20

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Member: puresnow
Title: How to keep a pet pig

Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 3/5
Overall Impression: 8/10

Comments: The work didn't flow easily; there are certain places that need re-writing. Your tone worked well the piece and you used good imagery. On the other hand, you need to make your writing more solid.

Score: 15/20

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Member: writing kim
Title: How to talk to the dead.

Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 3/5
Overall Impression: 7/10

Comments: The general idea is terrific and your thought sequence is organized, but I think you can do better. Regrdless of the length, the piece wasn't very well structured and there were grammatical errors that made the writing flow not so well.

Score: 13/20

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Originally Posted by Icarus (Post 110500)
Member: Queen of Wands
Title: How to Be a Grumpy Old Lady

Mechanics: 4.5/5
Intangibles: 5/5
Overall Impression:9/10

Oh, this is a delightful little doozy! Perfect sense of humor - and use of it, as well. It really came alive for me, which is rare in non-fiction. Well done!

Score:18.5/20

*****

Member: puresnow
Title: How to keep a pet pig

Mechanics: 3.5/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10

It's a shame this wasn't written with more care and attention to detail because it's really rather charming. Clean up the mechanics! Otherwise, I found it amusing.

Score: 15/20

*****

Member: writing kim
Title: How to talk to the dead

Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 8/10

I wish you had gone the distance with this idea (you were under the word limit enough to do so) because it's a great start. I feel like there were so many possibilities that you didn't address. Also, it needs some editing, specifically in the run-on sentence department.

Score: 14.5/20


Chloe 10-03-2007 05:47 AM

Congratulations, Queen of Wands! =) A well-deserved win.

gary_wagner 10-03-2007 06:45 AM

Congratulations, QOW. Well deserved victory.

I enjoyed all of the entries.

Q Wands 10-03-2007 12:00 PM

Goodness me! Thank you, judges; thank you, Gary. I'm glad I made you smile. Sadly the editor I sent this to decided not to publish it, but I have had a most kind hand-written rejection, ending with the most delightful words: 'Don't hestiate to try us again'. So thank you, Aprilrain, for setting this challenge. I might not have considered this market had I not written this piece at your prompt. Big, big smiles from me! :)

And thank you, writingkim and puresnow, for a couple of very enjoyable reads. I certainly enjoyed them both!

writing kim 10-04-2007 07:30 AM

I am surprized that they didn't publish your article QOW, though I hope you will send it off to other places. Your writing is far too good to be confined to the web, it should be in print for all to enjoy.

Q Wands 10-04-2007 08:23 AM

What a lovely thing to say, Kim! Thank you! :D

BreezyWriter 10-04-2007 03:54 PM

Congratulation Queen of Wands. Bring on the laughs we can take more.

writing kim 10-05-2007 09:42 AM

I hope that you'll be entering the fiction competition this month QOW, I think it will be a perfect vehicle for your wicked sense of humour. I also cannot wait to read Gary's version, because it will almost certainly be hilarious and original into the bargain.

puresnow 11-05-2007 10:41 PM

Thank you to all the judges. I don't know how I missed this.

I am so encouraged by your comments. As I am a very new writer, I am thrilled to bits. I shall endeavor to be more careful in my posts. In the few months that I have joined this site, I can feel myself improving and getting more confident.

I also like to thank all other writers especially QoW and Star.

Puresnow


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