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Forum: Introductions 01-03-2016, 12:33 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 913
Posted By Jolly
Welcome. I look forward to having a good cry.

Welcome. I look forward to having a good cry.
Forum: Introductions 11-21-2015, 05:35 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,050
Posted By Jolly
Nice to meet you. Hope you enjoy the site as much...

Nice to meet you. Hope you enjoy the site as much as I do.
Forum: Introductions 11-21-2015, 05:27 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,512
Posted By Jolly
WRC - Be gentle. Don't scare the little ones...

WRC -
Be gentle. Don't scare the little ones off right away!
Forum: Introductions 11-21-2015, 05:26 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,512
Posted By Jolly
Welcome. Always nice to meet a fresh face.

Welcome. Always nice to meet a fresh face.
Forum: Introductions 11-21-2015, 05:19 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 528
Posted By Jolly
Greetings and salutations. Looking forward to...

Greetings and salutations. Looking forward to seeing what you can do.
Forum: Introductions 11-21-2015, 05:17 AM
Replies: 2
Hi
Views: 556
Posted By Jolly
Glad you are here. Poke around a little and then...

Glad you are here. Poke around a little and then jump on in.
Forum: Fiction 11-07-2015, 06:10 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,704
Posted By Jolly
I liked it, too. I understood right away Mr....

I liked it, too. I understood right away Mr. Vernon was the owner since he was carrying around the bills. Maybe have him come out wearing a stained apron - because i wondered where the cook was. That...
Forum: Fiction 11-07-2015, 05:55 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 912
Posted By Jolly
I liked the piece. Yes - change gang banger to...

I liked the piece. Yes - change gang banger to maybe hired killer? He wouldn't take the money.

Sometimes drop outs are smarter than your average bear. Make him a voracious reader - listens to...
Forum: Fiction 10-31-2015, 07:37 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 786
Posted By Jolly
First - I like the concept of the story, which is...

First - I like the concept of the story, which is half the battle of pulling a reader in. Now, to get it down on paper - or as the case is now - on the computer screen in a way to keep the reader.
...
Forum: Introductions 10-31-2015, 05:43 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 2,503
Posted By Jolly
Jump in and start critiquing and then throw...

Jump in and start critiquing and then throw something of yours up for folks to check a look.
Forum: Introductions 10-31-2015, 05:41 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 713
Posted By Jolly
Welcome aboard

Welcome aboard
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-26-2015, 05:18 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 3,301
Posted By Jolly
I didn't read through all the posts - but no,...

I didn't read through all the posts - but no, they wouldn't publicly announce it. I was a journalist and worked on the police beat for several years. Never would have told us about a rogue cop unless...
Forum: Fiction 10-24-2015, 05:04 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,005
Posted By Jolly
Nicely written. I also like the last line, but...

Nicely written. I also like the last line, but agree it's not perfect for the rest of the piece. How about if she was her parents favorite journal - which has blank pages to fill. you pour your hopes...
Forum: Fiction 10-24-2015, 04:49 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 799
Posted By Jolly
I like the concept, too. Doubt a Neanderthal...

I like the concept, too. Doubt a Neanderthal brain was developed enough to learn to read and do math, but could be wrong. Could they speak?

Would make a good story.
Forum: Fiction 10-23-2015, 04:13 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 926
Posted By Jolly
You managed to make the mundane act of getting...

You managed to make the mundane act of getting dressed rather interesting - that takes some skill.

Now - if you put that skill toward something more interesting, I'd it.
Forum: Introductions 10-23-2015, 03:58 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 801
Posted By Jolly
Glad you took the plunge. Welcome. We'll see what...

Glad you took the plunge. Welcome. We'll see what we can do about your suckiness complex.
Forum: Introductions 10-23-2015, 03:54 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 846
Posted By Jolly
Welcome and write.

Welcome and write.
Forum: Introductions 10-15-2015, 02:35 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 751
Posted By Jolly
Hey wrc - the name is wraith - as in ghost - not...

Hey wrc - the name is wraith - as in ghost - not wrath - as in anger! Wraith - wrc has a bum eye so you'll have to cut him some slack.

Welcome.
Forum: Introductions 10-15-2015, 02:30 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 578
Posted By Jolly
Welcome newbie - which feels strange to say since...

Welcome newbie - which feels strange to say since I only joined in July. Seems longer.
Forum: Introductions 10-15-2015, 02:29 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 620
Posted By Jolly
Hey there and welcome.

Hey there and welcome.
Forum: Introductions 10-15-2015, 02:27 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,168
Posted By Jolly
Welcome to Writer's Beat.

Welcome to Writer's Beat.
Forum: Fiction 10-11-2015, 05:50 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 885
Posted By Jolly
Nice bit of writing. I did have read some...

Nice bit of writing. I did have read some sentences twice to get what you meant.

Reminds me a little of "Clan of the Cave Bears," which was a series I enjoyed.
Forum: Fiction 10-11-2015, 05:33 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 724
Posted By Jolly
Let me see if I have the story straight - these...

Let me see if I have the story straight - these are two college girls who are supplementing their income as prostitutes. I like their happy-go-lucky attitudes.

I assume English is not your first...
Forum: Introductions 10-03-2015, 04:09 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,322
Posted By Jolly
Welcome

Welcome
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-01-2015, 07:07 PM
Replies: 26
Views: 1,559
Posted By Jolly
The !

The !
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