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Forum: Fiction 03-04-2015, 07:36 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,587
Posted By SuperGurl
Happy to inspire! Although, don't edit too much...

Happy to inspire! Although, don't edit too much while on the first draft. You can fix a lot later (as I am doing) and its good to keep up momentum. But the first part is important, so I understand...
Forum: Free Writing 03-04-2015, 04:32 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 887
Posted By SuperGurl
I like this. The request felt real and I found...

I like this. The request felt real and I found the tone somewhat bittersweet (I don't know if you intended this, but that's what I got.)

Very nice.
Forum: Fiction 03-04-2015, 04:26 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,587
Posted By SuperGurl
Hi Sara! I enjoyed this opening, you...

Hi Sara!

I enjoyed this opening, you have a good style and I found that your words moved the reader along rather easily. As daes mentioned, I feel like that sentence could use a bit of a...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-01-2015, 03:18 PM
Replies: 65
Views: 7,116
Posted By SuperGurl
I don't know... I read a LOT and I'm always told...

I don't know... I read a LOT and I'm always told that I speak fast and too much. I also enjoy public speaking. So, not all bookworms are bad at speaking. :-)
Forum: Fiction 02-25-2015, 02:27 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,044
Posted By SuperGurl
Hi Madeeha! I read the replies and I think that...

Hi Madeeha! I read the replies and I think that your first post was the best story. Those four sentences perfectly capture the feeling I think you are going for and you need no more or less. You...
Forum: Fiction 02-09-2015, 07:45 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 903
Posted By SuperGurl
Hey! This is a quite interesting premise. The...

Hey! This is a quite interesting premise. The writing was pretty effortless to read and I enjoyed it. A few thoughts below.




Yep, interesting chapter, thanks for posting! I just had...
Forum: Fiction 02-09-2015, 07:33 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,803
Posted By SuperGurl
Merty, thanks for the advice, it is in fact quite...

Merty, thanks for the advice, it is in fact quite good. Daisy in particular needs some work but they both do and you made some good points there. I see what you mean about that first paragraph too....
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-07-2015, 07:14 PM
Replies: 25
Views: 2,906
Posted By SuperGurl
Rory Clark Zeus Arthur Killwilly ...

Rory
Clark
Zeus
Arthur Killwilly
Sebastian
Penn
Castor
Mycroft
Merlin
Ernest
Forum: Free Writing 02-07-2015, 11:12 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,673
Posted By SuperGurl
That's about how I write essays. And I think a...

That's about how I write essays. And I think a book about my life would be great... oh, but I've never done anything interesting.

Yep, I feel ya'.
Forum: Contest Central 02-07-2015, 11:10 AM
Replies: 36
Views: 17,196
Posted By SuperGurl
Lol, FX Lord! Definitely the pride of winning....

Lol, FX Lord! Definitely the pride of winning. Why else compete at anything? :-)

I am totally fine with raising the word limit. It was no struggle for me to stay under--the story ended when it...
Forum: Fiction 02-07-2015, 11:04 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,803
Posted By SuperGurl
Hey Konan, thanks for the read! I'm glad you...

Hey Konan, thanks for the read! I'm glad you liked that touch of reality. That realization was a huge part of this story--when you fall in love, all those activities are cool and attractive. Then you...
Forum: Fiction 02-05-2015, 07:26 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,803
Posted By SuperGurl
HI Joe! Thanks for the comment--really...

HI Joe!

Thanks for the comment--really means a lot that you took the time to read and respond!

I had noticed that my short stories have lately seemed very rushed, so to speak. I wasn't...
Forum: Fiction 02-03-2015, 06:07 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,803
Posted By SuperGurl
"Jacob" Short Story, 1000 words

I haven't posted in fiction for quite a while. Here is a little story I wrote based on a country song. :-) I'd love some critique on this, as I'm just trying to improve my writing in general. Also,...
Forum: Contest Central 02-03-2015, 04:25 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 17,196
Posted By SuperGurl
No kidding! I liked brian's story a lot. Very...

No kidding! I liked brian's story a lot. Very strong and believable emotions. And Agatha Christi--yours was very unique too. Definitely held my interest too the end.

Thanks for reading the...
Forum: Fiction 01-21-2015, 08:28 AM
Replies: 129
Views: 11,711
Posted By SuperGurl
I saw that story, I'll check it out when I get...

I saw that story, I'll check it out when I get back into town. I'm leaving for a few days tomorrow.
Forum: Fiction 01-19-2015, 10:35 AM
Replies: 129
Views: 11,711
Posted By SuperGurl
That is your opinion, remember if you identify as...

That is your opinion, remember if you identify as a science person you are biased. I agree that people ultimately believe what they want to believe and twist facts to support them, but that is all...
Forum: Fiction 01-19-2015, 08:38 AM
Replies: 129
Views: 11,711
Posted By SuperGurl
Thanks for the reply, I wanted to address all of...

Thanks for the reply, I wanted to address all of your points.
Forum: Fiction 01-18-2015, 11:30 AM
Replies: 129
Views: 11,711
Posted By SuperGurl
All right, I'll be the first to post! ...

All right, I'll be the first to post!

First, to speak to your writing, the flow was good and the story was gripping. Good job.

Now to more important subjects. :-) I am a believer and I...
Forum: Fiction 01-13-2015, 01:39 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 952
Posted By SuperGurl
I'm still working on this,and i have alot more to...

I'm still working on this,and i have alot more to write.Tell me what you think about it,and anything i can do to make it better.Enjoy!:):)hopefully.


It was a cold night, in the city; I was...
Forum: The Library 01-02-2015, 04:00 PM
Replies: 37
Views: 11,094
Posted By SuperGurl
For me, it was one of my favorite books that made...

For me, it was one of my favorite books that made me cry: The Phantom of the Opera. And it was a little bit creepy too. I was ten when I read it and I remember sitting behind a table at this college...
Forum: Members' Feedback 01-01-2015, 09:45 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,810
Posted By SuperGurl
That is a good point, but then I am guilty of...

That is a good point, but then I am guilty of getting into a religious discussion! I'm kind of non-confrontational by nature anyway, so Shelly, if you read this, I'm not returning to the thread in...
Forum: Fiction 01-01-2015, 09:41 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 777
Posted By SuperGurl
This feels like a promising start to a story! You...

This feels like a promising start to a story! You have style that has life in it, which is good. My first tip would be to try to break up the paragraphs (I know formatting is hard on here, but still)...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 12-31-2014, 09:00 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 2,059
Posted By SuperGurl
If the characters talking about "The Russian"...

If the characters talking about "The Russian" know his name, use his name. If not, refer to him however they would. It all depends on POV, I think. Not bad practice at all to use his name before he's...
Forum: Contest Central 12-29-2014, 06:44 AM
Replies: 36
Views: 17,196
Posted By SuperGurl
Aw, thanks guys! I was hoping someone would...

Aw, thanks guys! I was hoping someone would comment soon. It was so hard to be the first one!

I can't wait to see what everyone else comes up with. I know we'll have some good stuff soon!
Forum: Fiction 12-28-2014, 02:49 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,064
Posted By SuperGurl
Hey B.T. Smooth read, good writing. I...

Hey B.T.

Smooth read, good writing. I kind of pictured a ghost putting together what happened to her--don't know why, but that's the thought I got. The end had a bit of a twist. It was twilight...
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