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Forum: Fiction 10-02-2016, 05:21 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 899
Posted By Nil
Why don't you post a chapter here for us to read?...

Why don't you post a chapter here for us to read? Then I'll be able to let you know what I think. Thanks!
Forum: Tips & Advice 10-02-2016, 05:17 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,582
Posted By Nil
Icon9 Bland Protagonist

If your main character is intentionally bland, how do you make him interesting? He is supposed to blend into the background of society, barely noticed by others, until he is thrust into an...
Forum: Fiction 06-26-2016, 05:42 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 604
Posted By Nil
Icon4 A tough read

I got stuck on the first sentence.

Perhaps the deacon of nightmares was able to get his way from the victory that favoured greatly in the actions and swift thinking that had just taken place.
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Forum: Fiction 11-14-2015, 09:28 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 586
Posted By Nil
It's just too much. This feels like a chore to...

It's just too much. This feels like a chore to get through. I like the car metaphor, but please cut back. Feels rushed too.
Forum: Fiction 07-14-2015, 07:59 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 584
Posted By Nil
I actually really enjoyed this. Is it part of a...

I actually really enjoyed this. Is it part of a larger work or a one-off? Instead of showering you with praise, I'll try to offer some helpful critique.

The biggest thing is a borderline POV error...
Forum: Contest Central 04-01-2015, 04:54 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 5,107
Posted By Nil
Icon14 Thanks Tau and congrats to the other winners,...

Thanks Tau and congrats to the other winners, SuperGurl and AC. Any chance of a Spring Contest coming up?
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 02-27-2015, 08:14 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 2,939
Posted By Nil
It wouldn't be too hard to code something like...

It wouldn't be too hard to code something like that up ... Definitely not worth $20.
Forum: Contest Central 02-07-2015, 05:50 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 7,308
Posted By Nil
Winter Contest (Prose) - Entry

The Wrong Present (1131 words) -- by Nil

I needed a coffee. Jen's excitement about Christmas typified our differences. She had shaken me awake and bounded down the stairs like a bunny on ecstasy....
Forum: Writers' Cafe 01-21-2015, 01:14 PM
Replies: 35
Views: 5,087
Posted By Nil
I'm still a new writer but one of the biggest...

I'm still a new writer but one of the biggest mistakes I made early on was constantly changing point-of-view. I didn't even realize I was doing it until I saw a lecture about it. Now when I reread...
Forum: Poetry 01-17-2015, 10:27 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 460
Posted By Nil
Reconsider the title ... Dark matter is something...

Reconsider the title ... Dark matter is something we can't see because it doesn't interact with light. It's not literally black.
Forum: Introductions 01-17-2015, 12:37 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 641
Posted By Nil
Nice to meet you! I hope you can make time for...

Nice to meet you! I hope you can make time for writing once more.
Forum: Introductions 01-06-2015, 08:46 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 492
Posted By Nil
Very experienced for a 16-year-old. I look...

Very experienced for a 16-year-old. I look forward to reading your work!
Forum: Contest Central 01-06-2015, 08:35 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 14,934
Posted By Nil
I've been looking at some of the past contests...

I've been looking at some of the past contests ... Does FX Lord ALWAYS win!?? haha I'm going to try enter if I can work up the courage before the end of Feb. Has anyone else started writing (besides...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-05-2015, 09:55 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,530
Posted By Nil
After posting, I found this article by HoiLei...

After posting, I found this article by HoiLei from 2009 and it pretty much answers my question. It seems that my concern is valid, and the solution would be to set it up clearly like a flashback, so...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-05-2015, 08:55 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,530
Posted By Nil
Past Tense and Past Time ("Pluperfects")

I'm writing a story using past tense, but there are long sections in which the narrator remembers something from a past time. My understanding is that the correct way to handle this is to use...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-04-2015, 07:26 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 3,195
Posted By Nil
Thanks guys! I'll stop losing sleep over it and...

Thanks guys! I'll stop losing sleep over it and just say it ;)
Forum: Fiction 01-04-2015, 07:25 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 621
Posted By Nil
Thanks for posting. I like the stream of...

Thanks for posting. I like the stream of consciousness style, and the thought process is clear. However, there are many small things you can do to improve your prose. Here are a few specific...
Forum: Tips & Advice 01-04-2015, 09:14 AM
Replies: 18
Views: 3,339
Posted By Nil
I would suggest not focusing on word count. I've...

I would suggest not focusing on word count. I've read plenty of amazing books with very short chapters, and many of the best novels have a very small word count. It's just a number. Don't let it...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-03-2015, 10:18 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 3,195
Posted By Nil
Thanks Enrigo. Yeah, that's pretty much what I've...

Thanks Enrigo. Yeah, that's pretty much what I've decided. I thought about doing a very Native American sounding name but even that can be misleading.
Forum: Poetry 01-03-2015, 03:43 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 672
Posted By Nil
Very interesting use of punctuation. I think it...

Very interesting use of punctuation. I think it works for the most part. I'm not sure I understand your comma placement, though.

I know it's tough, but I would scrap the last three paragraphs....
Forum: Introductions 01-03-2015, 03:31 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 624
Posted By Nil
I look forward to reading your poetry!

I look forward to reading your poetry!
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-03-2015, 03:28 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 3,195
Posted By Nil
Thank you. That may work, but it would take a bit...

Thank you. That may work, but it would take a bit of build-up. I like the idea of pairing her with something distinctly Iroquoian. I guess I was wondering more about her actual physical appearance,...
Forum: Introductions 01-03-2015, 01:12 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 913
Posted By Nil
I love fantasy, but I'm trying to expand to all...

I love fantasy, but I'm trying to expand to all types of fiction.
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 01-03-2015, 01:06 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 3,195
Posted By Nil
Describing a Native American Character

Hi guys. I've been struggling with this for a while.

As I introduce one of the main (female) characters in a larger work, I want it to be immediately obvious that she is Native American...
Forum: Fiction 01-03-2015, 12:55 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 586
Posted By Nil
Good start! I would have preferred a stronger...

Good start! I would have preferred a stronger opening to really get me hooked. "It all started on a spring day ten years ago." doesn't really captivate me. There are also some grammar issues, but I'm...
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