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Forum: Fiction 10-01-2008, 01:35 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,007
Posted By marvinmartian
Interesting read...more like you and me "shooting...

Interesting read...more like you and me "shooting the sh**" after work, which is a different, and almost fresh way of reading IMO.

There was one line that is confusing, and I'm not sure if...
Forum: Introductions 10-01-2008, 01:21 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 840
Posted By marvinmartian
Icon10 Hey Ya'll

Been missing for a while, with life and all(I'm sure all you guys know how tough life can be sometimes, lol) and I had a heck of a time finding this site again.


Sorry guys, wish I could have...
Forum: Fiction 10-01-2008, 01:17 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,316
Posted By marvinmartian
SHORT STORY or MORE?

Hey guys, I'm not sure what exactly I'm doing with this. LOL

It could just be a short story, part of something bigger, or god knows what...but it only started as a writing exercise and something...
Forum: Fiction 06-03-2007, 01:20 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 808
Posted By marvinmartian
T.A.S - Chapter 3

Here's the 3rd chapter to my story. Let me know what you guys think, especially as a whole now since there is somewhat of a body of work to go off of with 3 chapters.

I have Chapter 4 done, and...
Forum: Fiction 06-01-2007, 04:39 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,183
Posted By marvinmartian
That's an interesting idea, are you talking about...

That's an interesting idea, are you talking about the "ability" like an unbelievable orrator, or like some type of power he has in some way?

I like that idea, but I want to keep it believable, as...
Forum: Fiction 05-31-2007, 02:23 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,183
Posted By marvinmartian
Ok, I wasn't sure if you had read the first...

Ok, I wasn't sure if you had read the first chapter, I was worried that someone might read this, or skim it, and go "Huh?" lol.

The fighting is from personal experience, it just kind of comes to...
Forum: Fiction 05-30-2007, 11:21 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,183
Posted By marvinmartian
Thanks for reading the chapter Poem Girl. ...

Thanks for reading the chapter Poem Girl.

I did change a few lines to make them seem a bit more skeptical and disbelieving the old man.

Did you read the first chapter too? I don't know if...
Forum: Fiction 05-29-2007, 01:36 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,183
Posted By marvinmartian
T.A.T.S: Chapter 2

Twins are the Shadows: Chapter 2

For those who didn't get to read the first chapter you can find it here http://www.writersbeat.com/twins-shadows-t10089.html scroll down to post #8, as that's the...
Forum: Fiction 05-29-2007, 01:16 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,187
Posted By marvinmartian
Thanks for the nice words. I too like the way...

Thanks for the nice words. I too like the way the story looks with this type of font, I just wish is was easier to post it the same way it is in Word without having to go back.

I was just...
Forum: Inkster Incorporated 05-28-2007, 08:45 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 596
Posted By marvinmartian
"The big fire ball in the sky completed it's...

"The big fire ball in the sky completed it's daily cycle, dissapearing into the horizon."

My version of the sunset, lol.

"The man rode his horse towards the lowering sun."

He rode off...
Forum: Poetry 05-28-2007, 03:40 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 925
Posted By marvinmartian
Wow, I don't know what else to say. That's...

Wow, I don't know what else to say.

That's a great piece of poetry right there. I love the way it flowed, in an almost oxymoronish way, if that's possible.

I especially love the "Rain...
Forum: Scripts 05-28-2007, 03:37 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 2,026
Posted By marvinmartian
I'm sorry but I was slightly confused by this. ...

I'm sorry but I was slightly confused by this. Maybe it's one of those things where I actually need to see it to get it.

Don't take this is me saying it wasn't any good, but scripts sometimes...
Forum: Board Games 05-28-2007, 03:31 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,039
Posted By marvinmartian
I hope I'm doing this right: ...

I hope I'm doing this right:
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The Elevator comes to back breaking stop. Women and men collide.

It must have been the emergency breaks.

A man with a tool belt...
Forum: Fiction 05-28-2007, 02:28 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,187
Posted By marvinmartian
Prologue: The Alley Nichole felt dizzy. The...

Prologue: The Alley

Nichole felt dizzy. The birthmark on her arm was itching. Marc, worried about his sister, moved closer. He looked down at his own birthmark, which by this time was burning....
Forum: Fiction 05-28-2007, 02:04 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 574
Posted By marvinmartian
To echo Onceupont a time, the characters seem...

To echo Onceupont a time, the characters seem interesting enough.

I do think there was alot of dialogue, and no description of their surroundings. I understand noone wants to read an entire...
Forum: Fiction 05-28-2007, 01:00 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,187
Posted By marvinmartian
Yeah, I did go back and update the end of my...

Yeah, I did go back and update the end of my first chapter, but I"m having a problem editing the first post. I tried once, and now the whole thing is all jumbled together.

I might try agian a...
Forum: Fiction 05-28-2007, 12:54 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,187
Posted By marvinmartian
I appreciate the kinds words and encouragement. ...

I appreciate the kinds words and encouragement.

I do understand what you are saying about information overload, and that's why I really tried to keep the pace moving, trying to make the reader...
Forum: Inkster Incorporated 05-27-2007, 03:40 PM
Replies: 28
Views: 2,141
Posted By marvinmartian
I understand the first post, and agree, like many...

I understand the first post, and agree, like many others to a point.

I'm not going to sit there and do a line by line critiquing, grammer and all.

But what I will do for every story that read...
Forum: Fiction 05-27-2007, 03:34 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,019
Posted By marvinmartian
^Yeah I think some guys are just humble about how...

^Yeah I think some guys are just humble about how well the right, and some people like me, who don't have a clue if we're any good or not, lol.

You're right Writing Kim about his story not...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 05-27-2007, 12:14 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,346
Posted By marvinmartian
Ha, that's an interesting theory, and something...

Ha, that's an interesting theory, and something I've never thought of before.

But now, as I think about it, I seem to remember school years lasting FOEVER, up until my Junior an Senior year in...
Forum: Fiction 05-27-2007, 12:02 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,187
Posted By marvinmartian
Wow, thanks for the critique Onceuponatime. ...

Wow, thanks for the critique Onceuponatime.

I wasn't aware of that minor flaw "He thought to himself"...I would have completely missed that, so thanks.

Adding a hook to the end of the first...
Forum: Introductions 05-27-2007, 11:55 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 950
Posted By marvinmartian
Thanks for the welcome. There are lots of really...

Thanks for the welcome. There are lots of really good writers on here I've seen so far, so I look foward to reading more of ya'lls work, as well as possibly posting my own.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 05-26-2007, 06:23 PM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,352
Posted By marvinmartian
I absolutely LOVE Historical Fiction...it's my...

I absolutely LOVE Historical Fiction...it's my favorite Niche genre under Non Fiction.

I too, think all genres have the merits and meanings...not just realistic writing or classics.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 05-26-2007, 06:22 PM
Replies: 22
Views: 3,352
Posted By marvinmartian
Now I know I'm a Noob here and all, but I just...

Now I know I'm a Noob here and all, but I just want to add a bit to this topic.

While I believe the classics and real literature are important, and should be tought and encouraged for young...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 05-26-2007, 06:11 PM
Replies: 27
Views: 2,195
Posted By marvinmartian
Well it could be worse, my teachers and guidance...

Well it could be worse, my teachers and guidance counselors said I befuddled them everytime I took any type of IQ or standardized test really.

I always blew the verbal/reading and comprehension...
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