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Forum: Free Writing 03-04-2014, 05:34 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 597
Posted By Cuchulain
Diary of Lauren Baskovitch

I published two of three diary entries on my blog, www.kevinlimiti.com, however I was wondering if I could get some feedback. I was originally using this diary entries as background to get to know...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 12-19-2013, 09:36 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 389
Posted By Cuchulain
Journalism

(I haven't posted on this forum in years...)

I'm going back to school to get a degree in journalism. My end goal is to report from foreign countries in general but more specifically the middle...
Forum: Non-Fiction 06-26-2013, 05:47 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 631
Posted By Cuchulain
The Danger of Internet Surveillance

Jeffery Rosen in an article for Time Magazine wrote “[Internet companies] decisions about whether to cooperate with government surveillance requests will determine the future of free speech as much...
Forum: Non-Fiction 06-26-2013, 05:37 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,339
Posted By Cuchulain
Not bad. I can relate to those feelings...

Not bad. I can relate to those feelings sometimes.

I don't know if you would get committed for writing about a spiritual experience but then again I'm not exactly a regular on this forum although...
Forum: Fiction 11-15-2012, 10:21 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 536
Posted By Cuchulain
Elephant Man, Four Naked Ladies, and a Funeral

There he was; the elephant man. Not like the movie, but the real thing, with his gray lumpy skin, his tusks, his black lifeless eyes, and his large floppy ears.

“Oh, hello,” he says. “Where is...
Forum: Fiction 11-15-2012, 10:15 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,181
Posted By Cuchulain
I just skimmed through it, but I think you could...

I just skimmed through it, but I think you could really benefit from learning the well-known writing motifi "Show, don't tell'. Basically, things like:



Could maybe be expanded on and described...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 06-29-2012, 05:43 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,430
Posted By Cuchulain
Anyone Out There Have This Problem?

Okay heres my issue:

I will have what I think is a really good idea for a novel and then I will start it but then I will not like how I'm writing it or suddenly get bored with the subject matter...
Forum: Fiction 06-29-2012, 05:36 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 519
Posted By Cuchulain
140 word short

The Great Recession--supposedly not a depression. No sir, it's just a recession, says Billy to Bob. Mr. President tells me the economy is strong, but we still got work to do. Don't worry, is the...
Forum: Fiction 08-11-2011, 06:19 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,467
Posted By Cuchulain
This is something I struggle with, admittedly. ...

This is something I struggle with, admittedly.

Any suggestions on how to create a better hook?
Forum: Fiction 08-08-2011, 04:37 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,467
Posted By Cuchulain
This isn't really a drug book, though I get what...

This isn't really a drug book, though I get what your saying. I actually find addicts to be pretty interesting in reality and fiction but to each his own.


What do you mean by 'pass on this'? I...
Forum: Fiction 08-08-2011, 02:44 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 831
Posted By Cuchulain
I'm not sure if I'm just stupid and you were...

I'm not sure if I'm just stupid and you were saying something really profound with this piece or you just kinda wrote the first things that popped in your mind in a stream of consciousness type...
Forum: Fiction 08-08-2011, 11:49 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,467
Posted By Cuchulain
Jack Carnie: Demon Hunter

Note: I posted this elsewhere and I got a lot of mixed responses. Was curious what you guys thought of this short intro piece.

Jack Carnie awoke from the darkness of his sleep, eyes blinking at...
Forum: Tips & Advice 08-07-2011, 06:16 PM
Replies: 88
Views: 9,907
Posted By Cuchulain
I've come to the conclusion that I probably (not...

I've come to the conclusion that I probably (not definitely) need a plan of action as far as novel length stories go, because otherwise I often run into traps.

However, I do have difficulty...
Forum: Fiction 08-07-2011, 06:12 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 600
Posted By Cuchulain
Sorry but it was very very difficult to read your...

Sorry but it was very very difficult to read your work cause the print is to small. I would suggest making it larger so it'd be easier to read.
Forum: Fiction 08-07-2011, 01:25 PM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,769
Posted By Cuchulain
Beautiful.

Beautiful.
Forum: Fiction 08-07-2011, 09:57 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 735
Posted By Cuchulain
Donna did a pretty good job of critiquing so I...

Donna did a pretty good job of critiquing so I won't say much other than maybe cutting down the exposition a little bit?

I'm really not one to talk cause I've done the exact same thing, if you...
Forum: Fiction 08-05-2011, 06:59 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,267
Posted By Cuchulain
Revised version

Note: I took a lot of each or your suggestions. I got rid of the voice and I tightened up the sentences. Take a look

Rose petals drifted from the sky like rain drops. The orange pathway felt soft...
Forum: Fiction 08-05-2011, 06:30 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,267
Posted By Cuchulain
Sometimes I'm not a very good judge of my own...

Sometimes I'm not a very good judge of my own work. That's why I post it on this forum, and others, sometimes. I did actually send it out to a few places, but I'm glad I didn't send it out to more...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 08-04-2011, 05:06 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,085
Posted By Cuchulain
Weren't they a punk band? Or used to be a punk...

Weren't they a punk band? Or used to be a punk band, and then turned kinda post-punk? I feel like I remember their name somewhere. . .
Forum: Fiction 07-30-2011, 07:52 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,112
Posted By Cuchulain
Thanks everyone. I'm noticing a pattern with the...

Thanks everyone. I'm noticing a pattern with the comments, not just on this forum but elsewhere, so I'm going to try and rework the first chapter to have less exposition.
Forum: Fiction 07-29-2011, 08:09 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,112
Posted By Cuchulain
Well, I did say it was Part 1 of Chapter 1. I...

Well, I did say it was Part 1 of Chapter 1. I mean it would've been a lot for someone to swallow the whole chapter at once you know? A cliche? well I can't argue with that, even though it stung a...
Forum: Fiction 07-29-2011, 04:34 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,112
Posted By Cuchulain
The Girl Who Gazes at Hills Chapter 1 Part 1

Note: This story has gone through so many rewrites but I want people to look at it again, because I don't think its grabbing enough to really work. Please let me know what you think. More to come.
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Forum: Non-Fiction 07-29-2011, 02:11 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 3,046
Posted By Cuchulain
Interesting, but how do you know what he looks...

Interesting, but how do you know what he looks like? lol
Forum: Fiction 07-29-2011, 10:50 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,267
Posted By Cuchulain
Thank you, both. I made the corrections you both...

Thank you, both. I made the corrections you both mentioned. I'm going to submit this one.
Forum: Introductions 07-25-2011, 07:19 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 689
Posted By Cuchulain
Welcome. Your certainly in the write place....

Welcome.

Your certainly in the write place. Post around, comment/critique other stuff, and when you feel comfortable, post something. I'm sure someone will be happy to give you feedback.

See ya...
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