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Forum: Poetry 04-18-2018, 07:22 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 428
Posted By mlp
I liked this. Poems are different for everyone....

I liked this. Poems are different for everyone. To me I imagine this piece is about a person who lies through their writing, giving off a false impression of who they are.

I liked it -...
Forum: Poetry 04-18-2018, 07:20 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 899
Posted By mlp
I liked this a lot, Nick.

I liked this a lot, Nick.
Forum: Poetry 04-18-2018, 07:16 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 399
Posted By mlp
Larva

Twisting turning
I'm Undiscerning
Looking for the way out

Always yearning
Constant searching
Please help me understand

Complete Frustration
My isolation
Forum: Poetry 10-15-2017, 08:30 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 1,081
Posted By mlp
I really enjoyed your work. The dashes,...

I really enjoyed your work.

The dashes, if read right, can really add a lot of emotional overtones that wouldn't be felt in a normal poem.

I really liked it.
Forum: Poetry 10-12-2017, 09:55 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 534
Posted By mlp
The World Today

The World Today

Maybe the problem is that I'm frustrated.
It's been too long since I felt elated.
I'm in a psychiatric ward, everyone's asleep.
But their eyes are open so it's confusing...
Forum: Fiction 09-22-2017, 06:37 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 813
Posted By mlp
The overtones of melancholy and sadness were very...

The overtones of melancholy and sadness were very obvious here.

While short and sweet, it gave a subtle glimpse into someone's life and tribulations.
Forum: Fiction 09-22-2017, 06:34 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 615
Posted By mlp
I loved all of the descriptions. The flow of...

I loved all of the descriptions. The flow of words very nice.
Forum: Fiction 09-22-2017, 06:32 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 587
Posted By mlp
Thank you for your comments everyone. ...

Thank you for your comments everyone.

@Grace Gabriel, the word "surely" is the result of typing with an autocorrect that doesn't let me know when it auto corrects something, haha.
Forum: Fiction 09-22-2017, 06:31 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 784
Posted By mlp
Hey Risk10, Thank you for your feed back....

Hey Risk10,

Thank you for your feed back. You did not leave me deflated. On the contrary, I appreciate any feedback I receive positive or negative. Every person's idea adds to a writers...
Forum: Fiction 09-20-2017, 06:52 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 784
Posted By mlp
Thank you all for your feed back. Very helpful...

Thank you all for your feed back. Very helpful for future constructions.
Forum: Fiction 09-20-2017, 06:47 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 587
Posted By mlp
Playing With The Dead

Empathy was not a word Quinten associated with his persona. He didn’t feel the slightest emotion as he slid the cold blade into Rebecca’s chest and moved it down to her abdomen with calculating...
Forum: Fiction 09-19-2017, 08:43 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 784
Posted By mlp
The Debt (Horror)

The shadow moved slowly towards Mitchell. The edges of its body blended in with the shadows surrounding it. If not for the shadow’s movement, it would not be visible at all. Mitchell had nowhere to...
Forum: Fiction 09-19-2017, 08:41 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 482
Posted By mlp
The Debt (Horror)

The shadow moved slowly towards Mitchell. The edges of its body blended in with the shadows surrounding it. If not for the shadow’s movement, it would not be visible at all. Mitchell had nowhere to...
Forum: Poetry 03-22-2017, 05:18 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 510
Posted By mlp
Exactly! You get me.

Exactly! You get me.
Forum: Poetry 03-22-2017, 07:06 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 510
Posted By mlp
If you'll notice the first four lines are a...

If you'll notice the first four lines are a mixture of positive and negative: Negative, Positive, Negative, Positive. So in essence a rising from negativity into positive thought.

The second...
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2017, 08:50 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 510
Posted By mlp
Divine Spirit

Pain of pressure and expectation
Elation of freedom and acceptance
The darkness holds me to its breast
Your breath gives me all liberation

The filth of dirt clings to my skin
...
Forum: Poetry 07-31-2015, 06:30 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 439
Posted By mlp
Management

Management

Policy, Policy, Policy.
For when I’m really bored.
When I have nothing to do,
I make up a rule or two.

Policy, Policy, Policy.
Rules for you and not me.
Do as I say, but not...
Forum: Fiction 02-13-2015, 09:48 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 619
Posted By mlp
Snap

Jackson Herbert sat at his cubicle, listening to the droning air conditioner and his cubicle mates typing away on their keyboards. It was enough to drive a man to madness.

Mr. Burk, Jackson’s...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-22-2014, 12:32 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,579
Posted By mlp
I have truly enjoyed some fan fiction. Not...

I have truly enjoyed some fan fiction.

Not all of it is wonderful, but I have stumbled across some real gems. Particularly Harry Potter fan fic, and a few others.
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2014, 12:31 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,318
Posted By mlp
Good Day, Unfortunately I am...

Good Day,


Unfortunately I am unable to discover a link to your writing.



Kindest Regards,

~Matt
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2014, 09:42 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 933
Posted By mlp
Chapter 3 The snakes wound completely...

Chapter 3

The snakes wound completely around Sylvia, covering her from head to toe. People in the audience screamed in terror at the horrific scene. Several of the circus performers ran into the...
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2014, 05:34 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 933
Posted By mlp
Thank you for your comment, and encouragement...

Thank you for your comment, and encouragement brianpatrick. I appreciate you taking the time to read, and comment. :)
Forum: Fiction 10-21-2014, 11:37 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 477
Posted By mlp
I thought it was a pretty direct story, which I...

I thought it was a pretty direct story, which I think many people can relate to - desire, anxiety, elation....

Keep up the good work & keep on writing :)
Forum: Fiction 10-21-2014, 11:25 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 461
Posted By mlp
The men in this story were both amazingly...

The men in this story were both amazingly selfish, and self centered individuals.

Personally I wish Paul would have lost everything - his family, possessions... everything.

The irony here...
Forum: Fiction 10-21-2014, 05:52 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 482
Posted By mlp
This had to be possibly one of the most saddening...

This had to be possibly one of the most saddening reads I have ever read.

It is difficult for me to read things like this, because I know this is not just a story for so many people in the...
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