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Forum: Fiction 11-23-2012, 12:34 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 819
Posted By Neil
Katie, thank you for the response. More so, thank...

Katie, thank you for the response. More so, thank you for the information--thank you, thank you, thank you more than you realize.
Forum: Fiction 11-19-2012, 07:59 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 819
Posted By Neil
Thank you everyone, for the comments. I really...

Thank you everyone, for the comments. I really enjoyed writing this, and I'm glad to see some enjoyed reading it.

Rooster: first, the honest answer, then the bullshit one that fiction (art)...
Forum: Fiction 11-18-2012, 12:54 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 532
Posted By Neil
The title is the best I've ever seen posted. The...

The title is the best I've ever seen posted. The writing is fantastic. I feel oddly offended, and the line--"I commented upon the beauty of the rain and it immediately stopped raining," is...
Forum: Fiction 11-16-2012, 12:35 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 819
Posted By Neil
The Sounds

Where we live it’s rarely quiet. Above us the neighbor has three mutts, two bulks and the third a runt, and we assume she’s a nurse because of the scrubs and the hours she leaves and the hours...
Forum: Fiction 11-12-2012, 04:09 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 480
Posted By Neil
Thank you, Webgoji! I like to receive feedback,...

Thank you, Webgoji! I like to receive feedback, but when is praise ever a bad thing? I appreciate it very much.

I'm glad you mention the speed of the story coming from the structure of the...
Forum: Fiction 11-12-2012, 06:40 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 480
Posted By Neil
Death Comes Quick

We’re in the car when it happens. It’s dark out, nighttime, and hard to see but for where our car and the cars neighboring us hit with the headlights, and everything’s so fast that when something...
Forum: Fiction 11-12-2012, 05:29 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 441
Posted By Neil
That's a fair assessment, and thank you for...

That's a fair assessment, and thank you for taking the time to comment. It's funny, because the last two paragraphs came in an unexpected surge of writing that I had not anticipated, and which remain...
Forum: Fiction 11-10-2012, 08:02 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 441
Posted By Neil
Don't Put It Off

He was alone. He looked lost.

“Do you need help with something, sir?”

He looked to me. It was that slow look, that long and empty, that one given by people you will never see again and for...
Forum: Fiction 10-31-2012, 09:25 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 668
Posted By Neil
Perhaps not a genius, then, but someone whose...

Perhaps not a genius, then, but someone whose writing could convince one of such. As I once cynically said (and now cynically repeat) anyone can be a genius, given the right critic. But it depends on...
Forum: Fiction 10-31-2012, 09:18 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 339
Posted By Neil
Devil Dust Song

Beyond the thicket evergreen, far past the first risen bulks, o’er the soil trekked long only by the hounds, their callings low cross the plains and shrill to the listen, he knelt ‘fore the stream,...
Forum: Fiction 10-31-2012, 09:16 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 487
Posted By Neil
Thank you both. The original title was "A Small...

Thank you both. The original title was "A Small Sad Story," so I don't know if humor was the intent (I'm not sure I ever have an intent), but if the piece was enjoyed regardless I'm still happy....
Forum: Fiction 10-30-2012, 04:29 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 668
Posted By Neil
I decided, before commenting here, to seek out...

I decided, before commenting here, to seek out your other work. And I might as well say it: You're an amazing writer. There is no doubt of it, and saying that you show the capability of creating...
Forum: Fiction 10-30-2012, 12:38 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 409
Posted By Neil
This is well done, and that's all I've to say on...

This is well done, and that's all I've to say on that. It reads like a prose poem, and, if you allowed it, could be given to interpretation, and what reader doesn't love that? In the fifth paragraph...
Forum: Fiction 10-29-2012, 06:43 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 487
Posted By Neil
Somewhere Someplace Someone

He went for what he needed. He followed the list. The list said milk, and so he went for milk. It said eggs, and it said bananas, and it said other things, and he went for the eggs, and for the...
Forum: Fiction 07-02-2012, 12:57 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 832
Posted By Neil
At the other forum where this was posted, one...

At the other forum where this was posted, one response suggested I strengthen the ending--that it bogged down the meaning I presented in the opening. I agreed with this, and see that the ending lines...
Forum: Fiction 07-01-2012, 10:21 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 832
Posted By Neil
That Way They Never Die

I had seen them enough times on my way home, less so when leaving. When we’d first been looking around for an apartment I had seen them at the corner, and made a joke to my co-workers that it was...
Forum: Fiction 07-20-2011, 11:03 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 591
Posted By Neil
Sorry for the delayed response. Life has been...

Sorry for the delayed response. Life has been very busy as of late and I forgot I even posted this until yesterday.

CandraH

Thank you for the grammatical fix. As for the message conveyed,...
Forum: Fiction 07-15-2011, 11:09 PM
Replies: 2
Ceo
Views: 484
Posted By Neil
Ceo

I am the CEO of a profitable firm. Today, on my desk, I found a picture of a penis. I immediately summoned everyone.

“Ladies,” I said to the women. “Gentlemen,” I said to the...
Forum: Fiction 07-15-2011, 11:00 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 591
Posted By Neil
Forum: Prompts & Challenges 06-03-2011, 06:59 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,024
Posted By Neil
Challeneg #47 - Whatever Darkness May Bring

You may find it odd to begin with foul a title but, having no knowledhe of those letters upon which my digits falls I must confess that I do not know where this shall end nor, truly, where it egan,...
Forum: Fiction 06-03-2011, 05:56 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 815
Posted By Neil
This is fantastic if taken solely as a glimpse at...

This is fantastic if taken solely as a glimpse at your ability. The paucity of actual narrative at this point obviously precludes any comment upon such, but had you posted more I would have continued...
Forum: Fiction 06-03-2011, 05:47 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 865
Posted By Neil
I have no idea how to incorporate multiple quotes...

I have no idea how to incorporate multiple quotes into a response, so... Yeah. Here goes!

Hilee Coco, thanks for the welcome return, and I'm glad you liked it. You're right about the passage you...
Forum: Fiction 06-02-2011, 08:12 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 865
Posted By Neil
Haha, undoubtedly. The subsequent "chapter" (I...

Haha, undoubtedly. The subsequent "chapter" (I use quotes mainly because I'm not sure that's what they should be called) follows a much more orthodox narrative pattern, with accompanying syntax to...
Forum: Fiction 06-01-2011, 09:49 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 865
Posted By Neil
1 (?) First the slush then gulp then the...

1 (?)

First the slush then gulp then the rrrrrrrr as it goes down to your innards and the sweetness of it and now it feels good, and now, yes, and now it’s good but you know later it’ll hurt and...
Forum: Fiction 06-01-2011, 09:47 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 865
Posted By Neil
Neil (Requesting Feedback)

There is, at the moment, no title for this story, which is in fact a piece to a much larger project to which I have been dedicating many long hours. Though a draft, I have not been able to abate my...
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