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Forum: Fiction 06-12-2008, 08:54 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
Allright, I guess I will. I'm so confused...

Allright, I guess I will. I'm so confused because I do want to give the
story a fiction-y feel! Hmmm. Thanks, E
Forum: Fiction 06-11-2008, 12:48 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
Yup.

It's a confessional, but I want to change the names of
all characters for obvious reasons! I'd like this to be about
an addict who's reasonably intelligent, has a sense of humor
and has hopes...
Forum: Fiction 06-09-2008, 09:45 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,383
Posted By ehoeveler
Yes! I love this - lots of action and great...

Yes! I love this - lots of action and great dialogue.
I was very entertained. E
Forum: Fiction 06-09-2008, 09:24 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 649
Posted By ehoeveler
Wayyy too many big words and grandiose sentences...

Wayyy too many big words and grandiose sentences for a
13 year-old boy. We definitely get that Nathan is an angry,
horny, outcast with a huge vocabulary.
There are some funny lines, however....
Forum: Fiction 06-06-2008, 10:13 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 887
Posted By ehoeveler
Greetings, SW; here are a few things I noticed; ...

Greetings, SW; here are a few things I noticed;

The little man - but again, I found myself wrong, because
he was not one of those humans who are named dwarves
for their height; although,...
Forum: Fiction 06-06-2008, 09:26 PM
Replies: 25
Views: 2,231
Posted By ehoeveler
Now that all the hard-working folks have done the...

Now that all the hard-working folks have done the editing, I can step in and add my kudos to the many. Way to go, very interesting and a clearly, sparely written story! 'Best, E
Forum: Fiction 06-06-2008, 09:08 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 4,418
Posted By ehoeveler
Wow

Hi Jay; I admire your imagination and prolific-ness (not sure that's a word).
The names of your characters, planets and places are very interesting.
Having said that, I feel that you have way too...
Forum: Fiction 06-06-2008, 08:28 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,307
Posted By ehoeveler
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Jay! I like your...

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Jay! I like your Avatar pic - is that your baby girl?
E
Forum: Fiction 06-05-2008, 11:22 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,372
Posted By ehoeveler
More

OK, here we go - should it be 'In school he was an average student, receiving fair marks,
never remembering anything passed (in) his exams'?
Still not sure which way you want to go in that...
Forum: Fiction 06-05-2008, 03:51 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,372
Posted By ehoeveler
Hi Lorissa; Again, this is a very interesting...

Hi Lorissa; Again, this is a very interesting storyline but I'm
running into grammatical mistakes and typos. Here are a few
corrections. I will edit further tonight after I get husband and ...
Forum: Fiction 06-04-2008, 09:52 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
appreciate the feedback

Perhaps you're right about the different themes. Right now I'm in the stage
of laying down words - don't know for sure how everything will fit. I have this
story to tell and it's supposed to take...
Forum: Fiction 06-04-2008, 12:51 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
Thanks, Nemesis! How ya doin'? I may end up...

Thanks, Nemesis! How ya doin'? I may end up having to research those two
pieces so I can get an idea. Thanks, E
Forum: Fiction 06-02-2008, 11:14 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,724
Posted By ehoeveler
I agree with QOW, the story is interesting and...

I agree with QOW, the story is interesting and simply written.
Please write more. Thanks, E
Forum: Fiction 06-02-2008, 11:05 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,094
Posted By ehoeveler
Hi, Lorissa; I love this story! Great dialogue...

Hi, Lorissa; I love this story! Great dialogue and interesting plot. The characters are believable and sympathetic.
Here are a few things I caught, however.
'quickly nullified at the behest of the...
Forum: Fiction 06-02-2008, 03:21 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,307
Posted By ehoeveler
Thank you!

Thank you, Lorissa - I have been having trouble with the
past/present stuff!
I appreciate your feedback. As far as putting the 'I' in
sh-t, think I got some sort of star-block when I tried to ...
Forum: Fiction 06-01-2008, 11:28 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
True

Yes, there will be some factual story telling and it is pretty depressing,
I must admit. I don't know how to make it light, I don't think I want to
at this point. However, I don't want it to be...
Forum: Fiction 05-30-2008, 12:53 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,182
Posted By ehoeveler
Crack-a-licious, more pages

Moved to non-fiction
Forum: Fiction 05-27-2008, 10:43 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,307
Posted By ehoeveler
Hi, Guys; I guess I'll close this thread for now....

Hi, Guys; I guess I'll close this thread for now. Thanks for all your help!
I will come back to this at another time but right now, I'd rather work on 'Crack-a-Licious'. 'Best, E
Forum: Fiction 05-27-2008, 02:22 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 914
Posted By ehoeveler
Hmmmm

I'm not sure - I'm sort of tangled up in a what was supposed to be a
brief take on the subject of addiction. Along with that I have done a
small background on Marc and the female chracter, but...
Forum: Fiction 05-27-2008, 12:19 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 914
Posted By ehoeveler
Hi, N

Thanks, Nemesis; I know what you mean. Am working on next pages - you'll
have background on both characters, an idea of what got them to where
they are.
How's Metif? I noticed you made a few...
Forum: Fiction 05-24-2008, 10:56 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 1,265
Posted By ehoeveler
Chuckies' Wedding

I'm in agreement with the previous critiques, though I have to say that
this could be a delightful story about a little boy with special powers!
E
Forum: Fiction 05-24-2008, 10:53 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 965
Posted By ehoeveler
Interesting but hard to understand in some parts....

Interesting but hard to understand in some parts. Alot of characters -I get mixed up with all the players and their parts. I like the very beginning where
Matthew leaves the lighthouse to go to the...
Forum: Fiction 05-24-2008, 10:36 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 1,042
Posted By ehoeveler
Nice

Enjoyed it as well. If you're going to answer the 'call', do it in style. E
Forum: Fiction 05-24-2008, 10:01 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 914
Posted By ehoeveler
Spacing

Sorry M, I made those changes. E
Forum: Fiction 05-24-2008, 03:50 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 914
Posted By ehoeveler
Allrighty then!

I will give them redeeming qualities but for Mark, it'll be hard!
Thanks, E
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