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Forum: Poetry 02-14-2007, 02:53 PM
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Views: 809
Posted By BleedinHeart
Bang!

Bang!
Forum: Poetry 02-14-2007, 02:39 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 600
Posted By BleedinHeart
That is priceless, Andrew! Thanks for the...

That is priceless, Andrew! Thanks for the chuckle.


PS: I liked your drunk poem...
Forum: Poetry 02-14-2007, 02:26 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 777
Posted By BleedinHeart
I have trouble here because I count the two rings...

I have trouble here because I count the two rings of the first line in the two phrases of the second.

The repetition of "wear" from line 1 is troublesome. When once I wore just one?

...
Forum: Poetry 02-14-2007, 01:35 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 798
Posted By BleedinHeart
I am not a beauty, This I count among my...

I am not a beauty,
This I count among my blessings,
Marking them on my fingers:
Judging not, while being judged;
I will not be found nude
On a hotel room bed,
Faking naked but really
Hidden in...
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 02:50 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,514
Posted By BleedinHeart
In general, I would try to avoid starting a line...

In general, I would try to avoid starting a line with a conjunction. It is usually not necessary and with a little thought and editing can be removed. Watch for "and",
and "but".
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 02:42 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 699
Posted By BleedinHeart
I like this and some of the clever wordplay going...

I like this and some of the clever wordplay going on in the piece. I was once told to be careful with such play however, because it often becomes the message itself. A couple of suggestions:


...
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 02:31 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 798
Posted By BleedinHeart
Thanks all. Hey Kit. Your comments are right on...

Thanks all. Hey Kit. Your comments are right on as usual. It has been awhile. I will hopefully have more time to read and crit other's works.
Forum: Poetry 02-13-2007, 10:45 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 798
Posted By BleedinHeart
No Pictures at Eleven

I am not a beauty,
This I count among my blessings,
Marking them off upon my fingers:
Judging not, while being judged,
Clever, helpful, courteous.
I will not end on a hotel room
Bed, found in...
Forum: Poetry 01-11-2007, 11:43 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 551
Posted By BleedinHeart
Anna

I was born on a Wednesday,
When dust from Island fresh fields,
Kicked high in the atmosphere,
Choking out the air and sun,
When my mother bled for the longest time.
And oh, she said,
they...
Forum: Board Games 01-08-2007, 04:08 PM
Replies: 3,104
Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
pore

pore
Forum: Board Games 12-29-2006, 10:36 AM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
lots

lots
Forum: Board Games 12-28-2006, 06:51 AM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
cows

cows
Forum: Board Games 12-27-2006, 10:11 AM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
sows

sows
Forum: Board Games 12-22-2006, 01:00 PM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
roses

roses
Forum: Board Games 12-17-2006, 09:59 AM
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Posted By BleedinHeart
loses

loses
Forum: Board Games 12-14-2006, 06:54 AM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
bloused

bloused
Forum: Board Games 12-09-2006, 04:25 AM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
douse

douse
Forum: Board Games 12-07-2006, 03:01 PM
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Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
noose

noose
Forum: Writers' Cafe 12-05-2006, 02:52 PM
Replies: 6,906
Please Read: Post Your Picture!
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Posted By BleedinHeart
This is the only picture of me in a bowtie I...

This is the only picture of me in a bowtie I could find. What a dork! It's from the early Paleolithic period, may be as old as a billion years, or it could be from 1986 when I graduated from Acadia...
Forum: Poetry 12-05-2006, 01:58 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 725
Posted By BleedinHeart
lies the water has told me

the analgesic wears away against
the cable and the steel.
the bridge,
the surface,
far far and hard below
whispers
save yourself and live in peace;
you cannot survive any other way. ...
Forum: Board Games 12-05-2006, 01:34 PM
Replies: 3,104
Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
loser no offense

loser

no offense
Forum: Board Games 12-04-2006, 12:47 PM
Replies: 3,104
Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
caste

caste
Forum: Poetry 12-04-2006, 06:53 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 738
Posted By BleedinHeart
I liked this, Kit. I was in my early thirties...

I liked this, Kit. I was in my early thirties when I lost my father.My children at the time were old enough to understand that grampy was gone. I have just a comment on style, a comment based on...
Forum: Board Games 12-02-2006, 07:27 PM
Replies: 3,104
Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
passe just imagine the acute accent

passe

just imagine the acute accent
Forum: Board Games 12-01-2006, 08:54 PM
Replies: 3,104
Views: 54,025
Posted By BleedinHeart
asses like donkeys...and stuff

asses

like donkeys...and stuff
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