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Forum: Poetry 10-30-2011, 03:55 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 790
Posted By GermanDragon
I like this. It gives a look into a thought...

I like this. It gives a look into a thought provoking subject matter, and then ends. That is, it provokes thought, and then let's the reader actually do that.

This may be personal style, but I see...
Forum: Poetry 10-23-2011, 11:31 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 482
Posted By GermanDragon
Asexual (Mild language)

This one is not a serious piece. But no one really understood my last one, apparently, due to a focus on mythology. ^^; So this is just a short, straightforward one, that was fun to write.

No...
Forum: Poetry 10-22-2011, 03:10 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 753
Posted By GermanDragon
The first three lines are an allusion to the...

The first three lines are an allusion to the Greek myth of Eurydice and Orpheus. The middle three are an allusion to the ancient Chinese Battle of Chibi, the way it is described in Romance of the...
Forum: Poetry 10-22-2011, 01:55 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 753
Posted By GermanDragon
Confession - To The Girl Who Sits Behind Me

This is... Well, I guess you could make the argument that it's a love poem. I'm not sure whether or not I would. It's more of an infatuation poem... But yeah. I'd like to hear any comments or...
Forum: Poetry 10-22-2011, 01:48 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,105
Posted By GermanDragon
I like it, it made me smile. :) I think the...

I like it, it made me smile. :)

I think the phrase "that's better flow" might work better as "that has better flow," or "that's a better flow"... Might be a personal thing, but the way it is...
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2011, 01:37 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 591
Posted By GermanDragon
I will agree with that one-hundred percent. The...

I will agree with that one-hundred percent. The dialogue is excellent -- very real. The non-dialogue by comparison, however, seems kind of rushed. If this was an exercise in writing dialogue, you...
Forum: Fiction 10-22-2011, 01:32 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 613
Posted By GermanDragon
I can't comment on the allusions to your overall...

I can't comment on the allusions to your overall plot found here, since (obviously) I haven't read them. But let's work with what is here:

First of all, you probably don't mean to say "smothering"...
Forum: Poetry 10-22-2011, 01:22 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 504
Posted By GermanDragon
I dig it, the style and the tone. I think I can...

I dig it, the style and the tone. I think I can relate to the meaning, if I'm interpreting correctly...

I'm thinking you meant to write "coalescing" though? A simple mistake to fix.
Forum: Poetry 10-22-2011, 01:08 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 529
Posted By GermanDragon
When I read this aloud, the third stanza is the...

When I read this aloud, the third stanza is the one that flows the smoothest. I feel that this is because of the syllable count being the same for the two lines: it sounds "balanced." I don't think...
Forum: The Library 11-22-2009, 02:22 PM
Replies: 3,722
Views: 295,280
Posted By GermanDragon
I Am Legend. And re-reading the first Harry...

I Am Legend.

And re-reading the first Harry Potter. I Am Legend is quite cool. Harry Potter, not so much. I forgot how much the writing style and feel of those books changed over time. I'm just...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-25-2009, 02:36 AM
Replies: 37
Views: 1,777
Posted By GermanDragon
I've been away for a few weeks, but this is my...

I've been away for a few weeks, but this is my kind of topic!

(Edit: And yup, I've seen Neverending Story III.)

Roughly in order, my favorite movies are:

The Shawshank Redemption...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-01-2009, 06:12 PM
Replies: 142
Views: 6,972
Posted By GermanDragon
"Hey can I have your number?" ...

"Hey can I have your number?"

...Complimented by 35 hours of not sleeping. I figured it'd numb my alertness, and thus my anxiety. I was right. :)
Forum: Writers' Cafe 10-01-2009, 09:36 AM
Replies: 142
Views: 6,972
Posted By GermanDragon
Update: I got a number. :D

Update: I got a number. :D
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-28-2009, 08:41 PM
Replies: 142
Views: 6,972
Posted By GermanDragon
Man I'm having such trouble with this... There's...

Man I'm having such trouble with this... There's a clear issue when I can talk to a girl for 45 minutes, making her laugh throughout, and then I just sort of... scuttle away afterwards, unable to ask...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-19-2009, 02:07 AM
Replies: 1,085
Views: 42,855
Posted By GermanDragon
Congratulations, Winterbite. I really hope you'll...

Congratulations, Winterbite. I really hope you'll cut ten words out of that, then take a bit of a break. At least that's what I would do. There's just something really cool-sounding about having a...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-19-2009, 12:32 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 3,127
Posted By GermanDragon
When I was... 7, I believe. I was in first grade,...

When I was... 7, I believe. I was in first grade, and I wrote a "story" which was really just a page combining different parts about The Legend of Zelda and the animated The Hobbit... but I was proud...
Forum: Fiction 09-18-2009, 08:43 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 5,308
Posted By GermanDragon
I love this. I'm not gonna pick out any technical...

I love this. I'm not gonna pick out any technical flaws, because I wasn't looking for them. This story made me smile and laugh. I love how it seems episodic. As I read it I actually started pasting...
Forum: Poetry 09-18-2009, 08:29 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 776
Posted By GermanDragon
I really like some of the rhyming, but the way...

I really like some of the rhyming, but the way it's read jars me at places. Take this part for example:

staring at old photos, tokens from the past
the love that started right but ended so fast...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-18-2009, 06:33 PM
Replies: 6,906
Please Read: Post Your Picture!
Views: 356,451
Posted By GermanDragon
Okie dokie. ...

Okie dokie.

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Forum: Inkster Incorporated 09-18-2009, 06:27 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,160
Posted By GermanDragon
Are poems more 'permanent'?

I'm trying to think of the best way I can word what I have to say here...

Ok, so one writes a story, then later shares it. There's bound to be a lot of things that can be changed to make the story...
Forum: Poetry 09-18-2009, 06:15 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 734
Posted By GermanDragon
Thank you both. Koin: Hm, you're right. I...

Thank you both.

Koin: Hm, you're right. I think I'll switch the first two lines rather than the first two rhymes.

Tau: It was meant to give an image of a blank stare... but now that I look at a...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-18-2009, 04:50 AM
Replies: 37
Views: 2,133
Posted By GermanDragon
I'm really a morbid, dark,...

I'm really a morbid, dark, borderline-sociopathic, at times... asshole, for lack of better term. The things that make me smile are often really sinister and evil, by most accounts. But what's posted...
Forum: Poetry 09-18-2009, 04:37 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 734
Posted By GermanDragon
Chimera

CHIMERA

Misled by the Serpent.
Clawed by the Lion.
Ignored by the Goat.

Which fate is the worst?

The eyes of the Lion burn with a passion,
A passion for slaughter in a merciless fashion.
Forum: Board Games 09-18-2009, 02:48 AM
Replies: 12,429
Views: 244,517
Posted By GermanDragon
Ace

Ace
Forum: Previous Contests 09-13-2009, 01:04 AM
Replies: 48
Views: 5,940
Posted By GermanDragon
Ok, I just came up with something. It comes in at...

Ok, I just came up with something. It comes in at the novel-length word count of... 263 words. Including the title. :D

But hey, it's 5:00AM and I'm tired. Just felt like writing something short...
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