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Forum: Fiction 07-25-2017, 02:27 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 860
Posted By Ink
I have a suggestion... 'cause this is...

I have a suggestion...



'cause this is THRILLERRRR.

Sorry to be sarcastic, it's in my DNA. The point I'm making with this is that I think the opening line is a bit... cheesey. You use an...
Forum: Fiction 07-11-2017, 12:35 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,536
Posted By Ink
Appreciate the comments, Ian, thank you. Glad you...

Appreciate the comments, Ian, thank you. Glad you enjoyed the read!
Forum: Fiction 07-09-2017, 02:41 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 777
Posted By Ink
Ok so I've had a quick read through and tried to...

Ok so I've had a quick read through and tried to help you trim this down a bit. The bare bones of this is very good and I would encourage you to continue, but you need to cut back on unnecessary...
Forum: Fiction 07-03-2017, 06:44 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,536
Posted By Ink
First of all, really appreciate all of you...

First of all, really appreciate all of you reading and commenting, thank you.



Yeah it feels a bit too clustered, I got caught up in trying to bring the fog alive and it's a bit word-soupy. You...
Forum: Fiction 06-29-2017, 08:43 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,536
Posted By Ink
Opening, Fantasy Short (200 words)

A tide of mist descended over Fogís Drop, blown in from across the void and skies unknown. It seeped inwards, oozing like pus from an angry wound to fill the squalid streets. Shutters slammed before...
Forum: Poetry 03-08-2017, 11:51 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 713
Posted By Ink
Thank's for commenting guys. I really liked...

Thank's for commenting guys.

I really liked the use of tapestry when I thought of it, I see tapestries as a dying art-form which can be used to depict a story through many interwoven threads....
Forum: Poetry 03-02-2017, 02:37 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 713
Posted By Ink
This Is Not Me

Do not be deceived by what you think you see,
No, I donít want your sympathy.
You donít understand my misery, my imprisonment,
The influence of injury and all of these small victories,
Which Iím...
Forum: Poetry 07-22-2016, 01:58 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 687
Posted By Ink
I was actually trying for more reference to...

I was actually trying for more reference to trying to tempt someone back from depression, feeling as though they're already dead
Forum: Poetry 07-19-2016, 06:13 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 687
Posted By Ink
Father, please!

Father, please!
What once was can still yet be.
Father, please, come back to me

I see you sitting there, in the wild expanse behind hollow eyes. I see your demons and despair, which bind your...
Forum: Poetry 07-17-2016, 04:00 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 579
Posted By Ink
All The Bullshit Online

When I was younger, I turned to words.
Then, these words I wrote would turn to verse,
a verse unrehearsed - and fit to burst - with metaphors of little worth.

Dismayed at my - rather outstanding...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 09-04-2015, 07:25 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 843
Posted By Ink
Favourite opening paragraph

Of any book, any novel, what drew you in the most in those first few sentences? Feel free to post it here. Just, please, not the bible.
Forum: Poetry 05-29-2015, 08:45 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 506
Posted By Ink
Baby don't hurt me, don't hurt me, no more.

Baby don't hurt me, don't hurt me, no more.
Forum: Poetry 05-24-2015, 01:51 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 2,624
Posted By Ink
Forget the poem, I'm more jealous of these bad...

Forget the poem, I'm more jealous of these bad boys.
Forum: Poetry 05-15-2015, 05:40 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 2,624
Posted By Ink
Jealousy

How do you not see?
How do you not feel?
The scars which you inflict on me
with the ignorance you wield.
Oh! Feign it off as innocence,
I'm sure my wounds willl heal.

It would be nice, for...
Forum: Poetry 05-15-2015, 05:40 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 469
Posted By Ink
Jealousy

duplicate, please remove.
Forum: Poetry 04-24-2015, 07:28 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 551
Posted By Ink
Yep, thanks. Cheers, Nick's helped...

Yep, thanks.



Cheers, Nick's helped patch that.
Forum: Poetry 04-22-2015, 10:05 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 551
Posted By Ink
The Quicksand Hourglass

My first write (and visit to the beat) in a very long time, go a little easy on me guys ;)




The Quicksand Hourglass

Regardless of how sharp my mind,
or how forceful of my will,
the...
Forum: The Library 03-22-2014, 11:09 AM
Replies: 87
Views: 9,412
Posted By Ink
9. Pretty low scorer apparently. A further...

9.

Pretty low scorer apparently. A further 15 I'd started to read but never finished, giving up through boredom, or -for quite a few of them actually - I found I'd started reading when I was...
Forum: Poetry 03-22-2014, 10:58 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 396
Posted By Ink
Thanks for reading and commenting, glad you...

Thanks for reading and commenting, glad you enjoyed it.



Thanks for reading. Went and looked up a video of the incident, and holy shit it looked insane. I had a much more tranquil image in...
Forum: Poetry 03-22-2014, 05:39 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 396
Posted By Ink
Autumn

Leaves in the mountain wind
Dragged across the sky by raking clouds
Swirling like embers from a flame
Leaving naught but twisted matchsticks
Pointing accusingly to the wind
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-16-2014, 12:44 PM
Replies: 33
Views: 2,996
Posted By Ink
Women. Seriously, why do you make yourselves...

Women.

Seriously, why do you make yourselves so damn complicated.

http://lh3.ggpht.com/_gXLJq-z63k8/TRjfcyK3WjI/AAAAAAAACu8/6LViSc6-ktQ/s800/evolution-men-and-women-gif.gif
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-09-2014, 03:58 AM
Replies: 52
Views: 6,359
Posted By Ink
Like it. Reminds me of Musth...

Like it.
Reminds me of Musth (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Musth) in elephants, sort of an overpowering testosterone smell. Apparently quite arousing to women, but frightening at the same time.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-21-2014, 05:56 AM
Replies: 31
Views: 11,312
Posted By Ink
On the flipside though, its also the most...

On the flipside though, its also the most uplifting to read a real-life triumph story. The ending of something like Long Walk To Freedom is pretty powerful.

My favourite character was Manchee,...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-21-2014, 01:21 AM
Replies: 31
Views: 11,312
Posted By Ink
Reading some of the stuff written about real...

Reading some of the stuff written about real past-events, Wild Swans by Jung Chang for example, that was a tough read. Fascinating to learn what China was like in that period but devastating when you...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-19-2014, 12:47 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,181
Posted By Ink
The fact that this counts as a topic is the...

The fact that this counts as a topic is the problem. He smoked weed, big deal.
Then he went drag racing while on drugs... actually a problem this time. Just put him in prison like you would anyone...
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