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Forum: Fiction 11-16-2013, 05:19 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 726
Posted By TomBird
Big suggestion: Remove the Amazon return to the...

Big suggestion: Remove the Amazon return to the original script. Also, repost it in no 12 type, I like Ariel, so your words can be easily read.

Tom
Forum: Fiction 11-15-2013, 05:41 AM
Replies: 8
Views: 892
Posted By TomBird
Other than the use of more idiomatic dialog than...

Other than the use of more idiomatic dialog than I personally care for, I like your story. The contrast between the girl and the uncle is great.

Yup, I look forward to reading the rest of the...
Forum: Fiction 11-15-2013, 05:16 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 434
Posted By TomBird
Thank you. This is not only the sort of...

Thank you.

This is not only the sort of criticism I appreciate, but it is much more than I expected. Unfortunately, I agree with most of your critique, damn it! However, I'm not crushed, but...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-15-2013, 04:12 AM
Replies: 35
Views: 2,234
Posted By TomBird
Unless handled by someone with training, First...

Unless handled by someone with training, First person, especially first person present, gets boring fast, as well as confusing.

I understand your desire to "spread your wings and try new...
Forum: Members' Feedback 11-15-2013, 04:01 AM
Replies: 26
Views: 2,889
Posted By TomBird
Your little red tag

I'd prefer that when I get up in the morning, the devil asks, "How ya doin' Buddy?"

But what do I know?

Everyone is entitled to my opinion.
Forum: Fiction 11-14-2013, 10:52 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 2,023
Posted By TomBird
Doesn't work at all, at least to me. Dump the...

Doesn't work at all, at least to me. Dump the royalty and keep the characters middle or upper working class.

Just a suggestion,
Tom
Forum: Fiction 11-14-2013, 10:49 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,426
Posted By TomBird
Even though it is a little rough in its present...

Even though it is a little rough in its present form, You have a hell of a thirty or so thousand word story.

I for one would like to see how you progress.

Tom
Forum: Fiction 11-14-2013, 10:43 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 434
Posted By TomBird
Closure

Here is a short story I offer up for constructive criticism:


Closure


They sat side by side in the front row of the small country church. She concentrated on the minister's words,...
Forum: Previous Contests 11-14-2013, 10:03 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 14,292
Posted By TomBird
Icon5 Seeking the missing contests

One big question: Where/When are the fiction writers' contests? Poetry is okay, but story writing is where it's at!

Tom
Forum: Members' Feedback 11-13-2013, 07:46 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,562
Posted By TomBird
You are in the same predicament I'm in....

You are in the same predicament I'm in. Everything is explaned... yet I don't understand the explanations. Okay, I'm an eighty year old crank with atrophied brains and a boggled imagination.

I...
Forum: Fiction 11-13-2013, 01:35 PM
Replies: 49
Views: 5,244
Posted By TomBird
Sorry, you have an interesting idea. However,...

Sorry, you have an interesting idea. However, Your treatment of the subject matter leaves a bit to be desired. Please forgive me if I have offended you. My suggestion is to start at the firse and...
Forum: Fiction 11-13-2013, 01:29 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,336
Posted By TomBird
It's people like you who make me glad I'm a...

It's people like you who make me glad I'm a plagiarist. Not really, but I am jealous of your story line there.

Tom
Forum: The Notice Board 11-13-2013, 01:09 PM
Replies: 164
Views: 36,538
Posted By TomBird
Icon5 Alas San Francisco

Thank you for the timely reminder. We need to research the markets in order to not follow the fate of many of the paper writers. There are online markets on the I-net, the predominant one is Amazon,...
Forum: The Notice Board 11-13-2013, 07:27 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 5,523
Posted By TomBird
RU A New Wrter?

I could "hear" your excitement in my "mind's ear." I felt that excited feeling the first time I saw one of my short stories published in "Desert Wanderings." The feeling trebeled when I SOLD my first...
Forum: The Notice Board 11-13-2013, 07:18 AM
Replies: 79
Views: 24,701
Posted By TomBird
I'm a brand new member who found a reference to...

I'm a brand new member who found a reference to it on the Internet and followed it to this site.

I've posted sixty-some stories on SOL, but need more interaction with other writers than is...
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