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Forum: Writers' Cafe 04-02-2006, 12:23 AM
Replies: 78
Views: 3,815
Posted By Neuric
Well, it is 5:21 AM, and as I slide comfortably...

Well, it is 5:21 AM, and as I slide comfortably out of my robotic dreamworld, I can report that a HALF dosage seems to have struck the balance between quality and quantity. Sure, I may not have had...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 04-01-2006, 04:49 PM
Replies: 78
Views: 3,815
Posted By Neuric
I suppose now is as good a time as any for me to...

I suppose now is as good a time as any for me to weigh in, considering what I'm going to be doing in a few hours. I'll start with the basics:
*I smoke the occasional cigar, and enjoy a trip to the...
Forum: The Library 03-31-2006, 03:11 PM
Replies: 27
Views: 2,194
Posted By Neuric
Umm......not to put too fine a point on it, but...

Umm......not to put too fine a point on it, but it's rather ignorant to claim that depression is akin to self-pity and narcissism. To assert that depression stems from general dissatisfaction with...
Forum: Poetry 03-31-2006, 02:40 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,237
Posted By Neuric
Ah, I hadn't caught that. For some reason, the...

Ah, I hadn't caught that. For some reason, the second line in the majority of the stanzas flows much more smoothly than the fourth, so it doesn't stand out that they're eleven syllables. ...
Forum: Poetry 03-31-2006, 12:34 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,237
Posted By Neuric
In my opinion, this redraft is a MUCH stronger...

In my opinion, this redraft is a MUCH stronger poem. The first one used too much internal rhyme- enough that is ceased to seem like internal rhyme and started to feel more like very short choppy...
Forum: Introductions 03-31-2006, 12:07 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 860
Posted By Neuric
Pleased to meet you Irish. You'll find we're a...

Pleased to meet you Irish. You'll find we're a pretty encouraging bunch, so hopefully we can keep your steam up and running. I'm curious, where were you published? Were you working freelance? In the...
Forum: Board Games 03-31-2006, 07:54 AM
Replies: 64
Views: 5,195
Posted By Neuric
(I can't help but notice many people's posts...

(I can't help but notice many people's posts don't seem to be oaths. We're not JUST alliterating here; we're alliterating with a purpose!)

By the queer quails of Quetzlcoatl!
Forum: How was your week? 03-30-2006, 04:56 PM
Replies: 396
Views: 7,469
Posted By Neuric
Repetetive.

Repetetive.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-30-2006, 06:53 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 974
Posted By Neuric
Ah well, many years ago, when puberty was...

Ah well, many years ago, when puberty was wreaking it's spiteful havoc upon my psyche, I was of the opinion it was best to go with a full-blown description of the act in its starkest detail. I have...
Forum: Poetry 03-30-2006, 06:39 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,231
Posted By Neuric
Time to put my money where my mouth is, eh? :) ...

Time to put my money where my mouth is, eh? :)
Well, allow me to preface my attempt by admitting that, due to it's vocabulary and wonderfully complex sentence structure, this is a hard poem to...
Forum: Fiction 03-30-2006, 06:04 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,363
Posted By Neuric
A few minor concerns. This one...

A few minor concerns.


This one description seems rather discordant with your description of her as an irresistable man-eater. I'm not saying women have to have large breasts to be attractive,...
Forum: Poetry 03-30-2006, 03:29 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,231
Posted By Neuric
My suggestion (And if this is already the case...

My suggestion (And if this is already the case then my apologies) would be to consider where your line breaks are. I appreciate the unstructured nature many people like to use in their poetry, but...
Forum: Lyrics 03-30-2006, 03:17 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 4,039
Posted By Neuric
I'm not sure whether I'm being LOLed with or at...

I'm not sure whether I'm being LOLed with or at...
Forum: Poetry 03-29-2006, 10:02 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,143
Posted By Neuric
I don't know, I kind of like the focus on the...

I don't know, I kind of like the focus on the body, and movement. Maybe it was just me, but the imagery I got was as if I was looking out through a hockey mask myself, pushing through the exhaustion...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-29-2006, 09:58 PM
Replies: 1,705
Views: 29,693
Posted By Neuric
Bestiality. (Puppy love- you know.)

Bestiality. (Puppy love- you know.)
Forum: Lyrics 03-29-2006, 08:21 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 4,039
Posted By Neuric
Hoo boy. First of all, thank you for taking the...

Hoo boy. First of all, thank you for taking the time to prepare this, I appreciate any chance to clear up inconsistencies or unclear segments of my work. Allow me to respond to (the majority of) your...
Forum: Non-Fiction 03-22-2006, 04:27 AM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,400
Posted By Neuric
What are your feelings on the Wizard of Oz? Do...

What are your feelings on the Wizard of Oz? Do the gleefully frolicking little people fill you with a sense of sinister disgust? Do their leering faces seem to be mocking you, even as you feel the...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-22-2006, 04:19 AM
Replies: 17
Views: 1,685
Posted By Neuric
I don't know. It might be 'penultimate', as...

I don't know. It might be 'penultimate', as that's the only word I consistently misuse, just so I can have a chance to say it.
It could also be 'clutch', as I'm very fond of both the 'cl' and 'tch'...
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2006, 12:59 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,003
Posted By Neuric
Wonderful. It flows much more smoothly now,...

Wonderful. It flows much more smoothly now, although for whatever reason in the Advil line I preferred taken over down. I couldn't really say why though.
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2006, 12:56 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 713
Posted By Neuric
Words

I wrote this poem about a year ago. Shit was going down, so to speak, and I forgot about it until I just found it. I don't know what it is, but suddenly I really wanted to share it.

Words
by...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2006, 12:50 PM
Replies: 30
Views: 2,872
Posted By Neuric
Large! Ha-ha!

Large! Ha-ha!
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2006, 12:42 PM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,558
Posted By Neuric
Oh most definitely invisibility. I mean, come on,...

Oh most definitely invisibility. I mean, come on, I already said I wanted to control people's minds.
Forum: Poetry 03-21-2006, 10:59 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 978
Posted By Neuric
I was shocked just now to hear that you're not a...

I was shocked just now to hear that you're not a native English speaker (I see now that you're located in Brussels). Your English is very good if you can write poetry of this quality. In fact, the...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-21-2006, 06:47 AM
Replies: 15
Views: 1,558
Posted By Neuric
Mind Control. I'm definitely going with mind...

Mind Control. I'm definitely going with mind control. Especially the kind that would allow me to simultaneously mask my identity with hallucinatory nightmare images.

Edit-> Either that, or Patrick...
Forum: Poetry 03-20-2006, 08:39 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 978
Posted By Neuric
Well, I'm gonna go ahead and give you the big...

Well, I'm gonna go ahead and give you the big thumb's up on continuing. I love narrative poetry, and your choice of an epic, Skald-style delivery is a rare and wonderful one, especially if this is a...
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