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Forum: Fiction 01-09-2013, 07:27 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 480
Posted By moxycat
Thanks MightieMouse! I intend to enter this in a...

Thanks MightieMouse! I intend to enter this in a short story contest at an upcoming con, so I wanted some input. Their limit was 3000 words...I had to strike 400 from my original version! I wish I...
Forum: Writing Markets 01-08-2013, 02:48 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,296
Posted By moxycat
Fledgling Publishing House seeks Talent

I have recently finished my first fully illustrated novel, with 5 more in the works. I have created my own publishing house, but I'm not 100% amateur, my father-NY Times Bestselling author multiple...
Forum: Fiction 01-08-2013, 12:43 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 480
Posted By moxycat
"Judgement Day" ...lengthy but worth it!

Victor lay in the hospital bed and weakly stared at the ceiling. You know youíre sick when itís tiring to lay and stare. His faithful wife of over thirty years slept sitting up in the chair next to...
Forum: Fiction 01-08-2013, 12:39 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 286
Posted By moxycat
You're such a good writer I want to drink my own...

You're such a good writer I want to drink my own pee! LOLS! Betcha never got a compliment like that before!
Forum: Fiction 01-08-2013, 12:36 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 340
Posted By moxycat
Totally agree with Mr URL, there were some...

Totally agree with Mr URL, there were some glaring grammar and punctuation issues. The concept is cool, but I think you're having trouble portraying what you are visualizing in your mind. One trick...
Forum: Fiction 01-08-2013, 11:57 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 395
Posted By moxycat
Well written.....but such a snippet! I guess the...

Well written.....but such a snippet! I guess the good news is that it definitely left me wanting more!

I have no idea what the rest of the story is planned to be, but I would venture to guess...
Forum: Fiction 07-23-2012, 11:43 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 891
Posted By moxycat
I agree with 'overbearing'. I am the queen of...

I agree with 'overbearing'. I am the queen of dropping 'f' bombs and spewing offensive things to drive a point home, but always remember..... less is more.

I also think this piece would work...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-19-2010, 05:40 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 839
Posted By moxycat
That's why she needs a companion. How long...

That's why she needs a companion.
How long was she with the soldier's family? It doesn't take THAT long to learn to read/write. If she was with them for a couple of years she could be pretty...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-19-2010, 05:50 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 839
Posted By moxycat
You have the potential for a very unique story...

You have the potential for a very unique story here. Don't keep it too historical or it will be boring, focus on the adventure of it.
Like Young Skywalker said, make a rough outline. Start at...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-17-2010, 10:28 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 839
Posted By moxycat
Chaper 1: From the soldier's perspective. He's...

Chaper 1: From the soldier's perspective. He's moving through a town with the other troops. Some of the other troops are brutal, totally lacking in morals. 'All's fair in war...' The soldier...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-17-2010, 10:14 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 3,749
Posted By moxycat
Nice! I like realistic plots: people die, people...

Nice! I like realistic plots: people die, people get hurt, s**t falls apart etc! It's ironic because drama isn't my favorite genre at all, but if drama's gotta happen it should be as real as...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-15-2010, 11:43 AM
Replies: 58
Views: 2,822
Posted By moxycat
El Jefe means 'boss' in Spanish. On a completely...

El Jefe means 'boss' in Spanish. On a completely side note, look up a poem called 'Triplets' by Tom Robbins I bet you'll like it! (it's related to Satan, I'm not just throwing random crap out)
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-15-2010, 11:38 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 839
Posted By moxycat
You are the writer, fool. MAKE it make sense! ...

You are the writer, fool. MAKE it make sense!
First of all, develop your MC. You don't even know if it's a girl or a boy. Second, you have the beginning of a plot, work backwards. You want the...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-15-2010, 11:30 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 713
Posted By moxycat
The others beat me to my advice. Just read the...

The others beat me to my advice. Just read the crap out of material from that time period. I would like to throw in a warning though; people don't read near as much as they used to, people have...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-15-2010, 11:18 AM
Replies: 33
Views: 3,749
Posted By moxycat
It takes a VERY talented writer to pull off a...

It takes a VERY talented writer to pull off a 'slice of life' story. No real plot, just some awesome character studies/ideas. *R.I.P. J.D. Salinger* If I were you I would think long and hard about...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-15-2010, 11:06 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 509
Posted By moxycat
Are you Italian? Do you know someone who is?

Please help. I am in the preliminary stages of a story set in Italy. I'm a stickler for authenticity and would love some input about daily life, family relations, local customs, etc. The story...
Forum: Fiction 05-14-2010, 08:35 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 882
Posted By moxycat
I liked it overall. A few punctuation errors....

I liked it overall. A few punctuation errors. Some grammar errors, but it's passable since it seems to be written in MC's voice.
It's a good beginning to something. Please Jesus just don't let it...
Forum: Fiction 05-14-2010, 08:28 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,467
Posted By moxycat
I'm not going to lie, I didn't even finish this....

I'm not going to lie, I didn't even finish this. It reads like a screenplay or an outline. I glanced over the other posts on the way down to my turn. You don't like English, but you want to write. ...
Forum: Fiction 05-14-2010, 08:02 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 683
Posted By moxycat
I'm going to skip punctuation/spelling/grammar,...

I'm going to skip punctuation/spelling/grammar, as there are quite a few of those mistakes. For the story itself, I get the gritty futuristic world, mixed with the clandestine drug/thug world. ...
Forum: Fiction 05-14-2010, 07:46 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 649
Posted By moxycat
Great input, I'm glad some folks finally took a...

Great input, I'm glad some folks finally took a minute to read it. One of the problems with this forum is that you can't really post anything too long. Or maybe you can, but no one will read it! I...
Forum: Fiction 05-10-2010, 09:32 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 649
Posted By moxycat
JungleGreen (please critique)

This is the first part of the second chapter of a novel. Please give me your input.

Lucid groggily opened her eyes. The world was blurry and green dotted with dancing golden light. She laid...
Forum: Fiction 05-10-2010, 07:48 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 725
Posted By moxycat
Hey Mudge, don't get me wrong, I wasn't calling...

Hey Mudge, don't get me wrong, I wasn't calling you out. I figured you were just trying to put your spin on an old tale. There's nothing wrong with that at all. I've heard multiple versions of...
Forum: Fiction 05-09-2010, 05:59 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 900
Posted By moxycat
to GodModule: Well, it was on the news, so it's...

to GodModule: Well, it was on the news, so it's not top secret or anything.
to Free_Mind: I didn't say it was an overt joke, or even really funny. Just a little connection to amuse myself!
to...
Forum: Fiction 05-09-2010, 01:18 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 725
Posted By moxycat
The first paragraph was choppy and overworked,...

The first paragraph was choppy and overworked, but you found a good stride. I like the writing, but the story is a well known urban legend dressed up in gingham.
I would like to see what plots you...
Forum: Fiction 05-09-2010, 01:07 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 900
Posted By moxycat
I made up the suspect's name to um, protect the...

I made up the suspect's name to um, protect the innocent *cough*. His middle name is 'Wayne' because on News of the Weird they always have a whole paragraph with criminals with the middle name...
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