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Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-13-2017, 11:15 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. But there have been stories where a...

Okay thanks. But there have been stories where a person avenged their rape by using murder before. Plus the protagonist wants to stop the rapist from doing it again to others.

So what makes this...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-13-2017, 11:13 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 2,102
Posted By ironpony
But isn't underground marked by his GPS, count as...

But isn't underground marked by his GPS, count as a place that only he would know about?
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-26-2016, 01:45 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. In the end of the story though, the...

Okay thanks. In the end of the story though, the protagonist exacts revenge on the rapist and kills her.

If I write so she doesn't actually rapes him and I just make it about manipulation...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-03-2016, 03:18 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,927
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. Well I was told that it makes the...

Okay thanks. Well I was told that it makes the prosecutor look really stupid, if he puts a witness on the stand, if the witness didn't talk to anyone beforehand.

So if I wrote it so that the...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-02-2016, 04:52 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 2,102
Posted By ironpony
Does this count as a plot hole?

I was told this was a plot hole in my story, and wanted some more opinions.

Basically the villain is the leader of a gang, and he has leverage on his members, should his members turn on him. Like...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-01-2016, 10:04 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,422
Posted By ironpony
Does this count as bad writing for this character?

Basically in my story, I wrote a female male character who is attracted to a male character that she sees, and she walks over, talks to him, flirts with him and gets a date.

However, I was told...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 11-01-2016, 07:26 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,927
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. Well so far in the crime case,...

Okay thanks. Well so far in the crime case, there is no reason for new evidence to be discovered. Everything has already been discovered, and there is no logical reason for anything to be missed,...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-28-2016, 05:45 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,927
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. I can't seem to do that without...

Okay thanks. I can't seem to do that without making the characters look stupid though. For example, if I wrote it so the prosecutor puts witnesses on the stand, not knowing what they are going to...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-25-2016, 02:18 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,927
Posted By ironpony
How can I make a courtroom thriller interesting in this way?

I have an idea for a courtroom thriller and wrote out a few drafts. However, some readers have pointed out a huge plot hole, in that the lawyers, are surprised by witnesses testimony and did not see...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-12-2016, 09:15 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,715
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. I can't really write it so that...

Okay thanks. I can't really write it so that there is an informant though, cause if there was the gang would have been caught long ago and the story would be over too soon. The police only have...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-07-2016, 05:47 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,715
Posted By ironpony
Which idea for a climax is better for my story?

Basically for my story, it's a cops vs. gangsters crime thriller type thriller.

I need a method of the villains being caught by the police for my climax. Earlier in the story, the gang is putting...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 09-18-2016, 02:08 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. I am wanting to write to write it...

Okay thanks. I am wanting to write to write it all out but so far people I have asked said that the villain and the MC are stupid and that the idea wouldn't work.

The villain is stupid for trying...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 09-09-2016, 03:33 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,875
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. Actually the new recruit is a cop,...

Okay thanks. Actually the new recruit is a cop, but a crooked one. Basically one of the gang members knows the crooked cop and has a personal relationship with him. So they want to recruit him...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 09-08-2016, 10:55 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,875
Posted By ironpony
Is this story idea plausible?

I have written out almost my whole story, but there is one thing I keep coming back on that I cannot fix, and that is how the villains get away with their criminal predicament.

Basically for my...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 09-01-2016, 02:36 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. The villain actually sends in...

Okay thanks. The villain actually sends in videos of the rapes and messages to the media, and on the internet, anonymously. She does this to make her crimes known to the public and brag.

So even...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-31-2016, 12:39 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. But I want the victims to live...

Okay thanks. But I want the victims to live after, not be bleed to death or unable to walk.
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 08-31-2016, 10:42 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 3,209
Posted By ironpony
Question about writing this type of serial rapist character.

Sorry if this comes off as offensive. I don't mean to be, I am just writing a controversial story and would like some advice, if that is okay.

It's about a female serial rapist who is going...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 07-29-2016, 03:18 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 1,261
Posted By ironpony
Does this ending have to be explained to the reader in order to be understood?

For my script, it's about a cop who wants to bring down a gang of criminals, even breaking the law and do it on his own himself, to try to do it successfully.

However, when writing it, I kept...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 06-12-2016, 12:06 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,353
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. Basically the problem is, is that...

Okay thanks. Basically the problem is, is that how can I write an action scene without it being a life or death sentence?

For example, if a gunfight or a car chase were to happen, the police are...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 06-12-2016, 01:32 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 1,353
Posted By ironpony
Writing action scenes without consequence; good or bad?

I am refining a thriller type screenplay and changing some things around. I was told before that it is too heavy and complicated on plot, so I decided to cut down.

I was thinking of writing it so...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 05-06-2016, 09:08 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 1,492
Posted By ironpony
How can I suspend disbelief in the thriller genre, the right way?

When it comes to writing, a lot of times readers will tell me that a situation is unrealistic. Mostly police or legal situations, and they have a problem with that.

However, lots of movies have...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 04-24-2016, 02:34 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,431
Posted By ironpony
Okay thanks. That's an interesting idea. Do you...

Okay thanks. That's an interesting idea. Do you think that the MC could not turn in the rapist on the new evidence, cause it would be a conflict of interest and he would have no authorization to...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 04-24-2016, 02:05 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,431
Posted By ironpony
Well she doesn't necessarily use viagra. I did...

Well she doesn't necessarily use viagra. I did research but I found out that if a guy is resisting in fear, the drug will not work chemical wise. So she would have to use something else.

And she...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 04-24-2016, 01:01 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 1,431
Posted By ironpony
Which type of character ending is better for this premise do you think?

For my story, I am not sure how to end it, as I have several directions I could go. I am halfway finished and the rest depends upon what ending I decide to build into.

The story is about a serial...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 04-24-2016, 12:59 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 1,174
Posted By ironpony
Which of these two ending ideas is better for this premise?

Sorry my post, posted twice. Not sure why. Sorry.
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