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Forum: Fiction 03-20-2012, 06:21 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 407
Posted By Dogen
Desert Storm (~1100 words)

This is the first chapter for a story I'm working on. Just looking for general opinions really on the writing style and how the scene is set. Impressions on the characters and where you think the...
Forum: Fiction 03-20-2012, 06:15 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 559
Posted By Dogen
Extremely sad, and provoking. Think you captured...

Extremely sad, and provoking. Think you captured the essence of losing a loved one very well.

I might just be being dense, but what's the significance of 21? Didn't quite understand that part....
Forum: Fiction 03-20-2012, 06:09 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,083
Posted By Dogen
Yeah really liked it, very quirky and humourous....

Yeah really liked it, very quirky and humourous. Turns dark but the transition doesn't feel at all unwelcome. Entertaining short story. Good job.
Forum: Free Writing 02-16-2012, 08:06 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 611
Posted By Dogen
Importance of Perspective (~700 words)

Do you ever feel insignificant? If you don't, you probably haven't considered the facts. The vastness of this universe can swallow you whole if you stand still for too long; your mind will wander too...
Forum: Fiction 10-12-2011, 04:06 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 676
Posted By Dogen
Nerves [674 words]

Haven't posted on here in a while, actually haven't written anything in a while, so here's a short without a home. I'm a little rusty so don't worry I expect to be ripped apart.
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Forum: Fiction 05-04-2011, 06:07 PM
Replies: 25
Views: 3,457
Posted By Dogen
Yeah, I was thinking Goosebumps. I loved those so...

Yeah, I was thinking Goosebumps. I loved those so much.


On the story:

I thought it was good, very creepy as others have said. I especially liked the detail in the last paragraph.

My main...
Forum: Issues 05-04-2011, 03:35 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 8,901
Posted By Dogen
Another great issue, I'm ecstatic to be included....

Another great issue, I'm ecstatic to be included.

Big thanks to everyone who voted for my story. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Forum: Free Writing 04-14-2011, 05:30 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 2,045
Posted By Dogen
Comedy plot idea

So there's the cliché sport stories of some champion who trains, falls on hard times, then trains harder and ultimately wins the world series or bests his rival. You've all seen Seabiscuit. It's...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 04-04-2011, 04:35 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,545
Posted By Dogen
http://www.everydayfiction.com/spermicidal-by-char...

http://www.everydayfiction.com/spermicidal-by-charlie-bowers/

I got published today! There's the link.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 04-03-2011, 03:00 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,545
Posted By Dogen
Cheers guys!

Cheers guys!
Forum: Fiction 04-02-2011, 03:36 PM
Replies: 17
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Views: 2,218
Posted By Dogen
Really liked this. Believable character, and many...

Really liked this. Believable character, and many laugh-out-loud moments. Very much liked the writing style.
Forum: Fiction 03-28-2011, 02:23 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 790
Posted By Dogen
Just two very minor edits for me. I really...

Just two very minor edits for me.

I really liked this, thought it was cleverly written. The double-bluff of it actually being the quiet, sinister guy in the back seat caught me off guard nicely.
...
Forum: Fiction 03-28-2011, 02:13 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 827
Posted By Dogen
This story is quite typical: the outcast in high...

This story is quite typical: the outcast in high school wants to become popular. There has to either be something different about her as a person, or the way in which she finds popularity has to be...
Forum: Fiction 03-28-2011, 02:09 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 811
Posted By Dogen
Yeah, you need to work on the way you tell the...

Yeah, you need to work on the way you tell the story here. As RITS said, in the opening paragraphs so many sentences start with "He did this", or "he felt that". It gets tiresome and makes it a chore...
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-28-2011, 12:11 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,527
Posted By Dogen
Thoroughly enjoyed that. I would have loved to...

Thoroughly enjoyed that. I would have loved to see Cecil's face when he read it, if he read it.
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-28-2011, 10:21 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,527
Posted By Dogen
Ha, I guess that's a grim assurance. ...

Ha, I guess that's a grim assurance.



Certainly did help, thanks. I've heard of sending it to yourself as a copyright, think my Mum did that with her novel. I probably will too if I make...
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-28-2011, 09:52 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,527
Posted By Dogen
Because I need criticism and i'm willing to...

Because I need criticism and i'm willing to accept risk to get it, I just think it might be an idea to minimise that risk.



That's fine for novels, but what about short stories?
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-28-2011, 09:08 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,527
Posted By Dogen
True, but I take the risk here and only here...

True, but I take the risk here and only here because I need critique. I get that there will always be a risk, i'm just thinking about ways of lowering it.

But I don't really give a damn about...
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-28-2011, 08:43 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,527
Posted By Dogen
Icon5 Members Only Forum

Is anyone else sometimes a little wary of posting work here? It protects first rights, but what about people simply stealing your work?

I know it sounds massively arrogant to even suggest that my...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-27-2011, 01:07 PM
Replies: 6,906
Please Read: Post Your Picture!
Views: 348,502
Posted By Dogen
http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y267/S0m3guy/2011...

http://i7.photobucket.com/albums/y267/S0m3guy/2011-01-0514-01-42411.jpg

Evening.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-27-2011, 04:07 AM
Replies: 9,244
Views: 290,163
Posted By Dogen
Today - Smashing Pumpkins

Today - Smashing Pumpkins
Forum: Writers' Cafe 03-27-2011, 02:37 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,545
Posted By Dogen
I Got Published!

At a site called Every Day Fiction. I submitted a few pieces about a month ago and today I got an e-mail saying they're going to publish one of them! They said they'd let me know when they know what...
Forum: Members' Feedback 03-23-2011, 07:36 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 3,814
Posted By Dogen
I try to make a rule of critiquing at least 3...

I try to make a rule of critiquing at least 3 pieces for every 1 I submit. Of course on top of that I read and comment on stuff that just catches my eye, but I try to keep it as a bare minimum.
Forum: Free Writing 03-23-2011, 07:32 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 803
Posted By Dogen
And some facepaint?

And some facepaint?
Forum: Free Writing 03-23-2011, 06:58 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 803
Posted By Dogen
Nice story. Had to read it because my name is...

Nice story. Had to read it because my name is Charlie, too.

I'm not black, though. And I don't have any cats.
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