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Forum: Fiction 11-07-2013, 10:04 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,078
Posted By Brett_Knoss
@catski yeah I read a lot of people like Keourac,...

@catski yeah I read a lot of people like Keourac, Hunter, Miller, Seinfeld(not sure if he has any books but I did enjoy Sarah Silverman's memoir). I think I did better in the first part, but need to...
Forum: Fiction 11-01-2013, 02:43 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,078
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Don't be afraid to let me know what you think.

Don't be afraid to let me know what you think.
Forum: Fiction 11-01-2013, 10:21 AM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
I did a revised version of this if anyone wants...

I did a revised version of this if anyone wants to read it. http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=48840
Forum: Fiction 11-01-2013, 10:19 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,078
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Gas! (revised)

I was just out of college, and my bachelors degree wasn’t worth a penny, or even the copper in a penny. Something I wish I knew before I spent twenty grand on it. Still, with my ambition, my...
Forum: Fiction 10-15-2013, 09:23 AM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
@TimBowe that bad huh?

@TimBowe that bad huh?
Forum: Fiction 10-13-2013, 06:14 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 885
Posted By Brett_Knoss
@Delmar_Cooper That makes sence, but somewhere...

@Delmar_Cooper That makes sence, but somewhere like Moose Jaw or Regina, or even a larger city like Calgary I think would work better, Fort MacLeod just seems a little out of the way.
Forum: Fiction 10-13-2013, 02:07 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 885
Posted By Brett_Knoss
OK. I'm not sure about the Cheyenne, I know...

OK. I'm not sure about the Cheyenne, I know Crazy Horse didn't, but a lot of Lakota followed Sitting Bull to Wood Mountain, Saskatchewan where the were cared for by the NWMP under Maj. Walsh and a...
Forum: Fiction 10-13-2013, 11:21 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 885
Posted By Brett_Knoss
It's interesting. Would they by chance be...

It's interesting. Would they by chance be related to the Wood Mountain Lakota?
Forum: Fiction 10-13-2013, 11:04 AM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Thanks all. I should probably get someone to...

Thanks all. I should probably get someone to look at the spelling.
Forum: Fiction 10-12-2013, 01:12 PM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Yeah, I could make it into a novel if I wanted. ...

Yeah, I could make it into a novel if I wanted. I probably need something simpler for a short story.
Forum: Fiction 10-12-2013, 11:01 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 456
Posted By Brett_Knoss
An abbot is the head of a ministry which are...

An abbot is the head of a ministry which are usually called orders. I like your se of suspence though.
Forum: Fiction 10-12-2013, 10:56 AM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Any help for improvement would be appriciated.

Any help for improvement would be appriciated.
Forum: Fiction 10-12-2013, 09:08 AM
Replies: 9
Gas
Views: 1,035
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Icon5 Gas

I was just out of college, and my bachelors degree wasn’t worth a penny, let alone the copper in a penny. Something I wish I knew before I spent ten grand on it. Still with my ambition, my...
Forum: Fiction 08-06-2013, 12:30 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 851
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Compelling story. Only thing I would say is that...

Compelling story. Only thing I would say is that this doesn't seem like distant future technology more like 2025 technology. Also, why is this unit being founded? Have aliens attacked us?
...
Forum: Fiction 06-20-2013, 11:28 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
I did another...

I did another draft.http://www.writersbeat.com/showthread.php?t=46532
Forum: Fiction 06-20-2013, 11:25 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 451
Posted By Brett_Knoss
A night out

I was meeting my sister at the bar to see “Shoebox,” a local band she liked.

I was sitting in the corner watching the 19 year olds shove each other until the bouncer yelled at them.

"Where...
Forum: Fiction 06-19-2013, 03:43 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Thanks, that's good to know. I actually think the...

Thanks, that's good to know. I actually think the tv was in colour with the contrast to low, so that everything is kinda grey. Maybe in black and white with high contrast like a two colour print.
Forum: Fiction 06-19-2013, 01:56 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
The title says Uncle Jake though.

The title says Uncle Jake though.
Forum: Fiction 06-19-2013, 01:45 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
I did a narrative essay Uncle Jack that was more...

I did a narrative essay Uncle Jack that was more descriptive and structured, but little dialogue.
Forum: Fiction 06-19-2013, 01:31 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Thanks. The story is fiction, but it's mostly...

Thanks. The story is fiction, but it's mostly based on observation. I think I should have structured the story first.
Forum: Fiction 06-19-2013, 09:28 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 670
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Shoebox

OK this is a first draft. I'm mostly working on natural conversation, and simple visual description.

Shoebox


I was meeting my sister at the bar to see “Shoebox,” a local band she liked. I...
Forum: Free Writing 06-18-2013, 03:36 PM
Replies: 301
Views: 68,067
Posted By Brett_Knoss
She says she'll help me, but first she needs to...

She says she'll help me, but first she needs to buy some shoes, and tank tops and a few things. Now when you're shopping every little detail seems important. I'm not sure if I want the blue Chuck...
Forum: Fiction 06-17-2013, 10:51 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 838
Posted By Brett_Knoss
it's cute. maybe that could be used as...

it's cute. maybe that could be used as dialouge..dialog.. ack... ugh.... dialogue! in a story
Forum: Fiction 06-17-2013, 10:05 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 522
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Thanks I was trying to be funny

Thanks I was trying to be funny
Forum: Fiction 06-16-2013, 03:56 PM
Replies: 8
Views: 620
Posted By Brett_Knoss
Do we need to know that the old person is going...

Do we need to know that the old person is going to and from the flat? It's the only place they go so I don't think you need to say it so much.
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