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Forum: Members' Feedback 03-09-2018, 12:46 AM
Replies: 4
Views: 605
Posted By Brett Nortje
Standards.

I find the standard of writing on this forum, from the point of view of a reader that enjoys original stories, has become extremely interesting.

Very original stories with very original concepts....
Forum: Fiction 03-04-2018, 02:12 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 513
Posted By Brett Nortje
Lucifer through the looking glass.

Lucifer, tired of all the squabbling of the tribes, tired of the same food, and, most of all tired of the moaning of his family, sat in his room. He thought about exciting things, thought about the...
Forum: Fiction 12-24-2017, 02:54 AM
Replies: 200
Views: 24,366
Posted By Brett Nortje
I truly find this most noteworthy. A truly well...

I truly find this most noteworthy. A truly well put together, imaginative and all round breath taking short story. You should get published!

On the bad side, the wording is very 'big.' The speed...
Forum: Fiction 04-24-2017, 01:05 PM
Replies: 5
Views: 910
Posted By Brett Nortje
I would like to read more.

I would like to read more.
Forum: Fiction 12-08-2016, 02:27 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 6,099
Posted By Brett Nortje
This is a well written funny story. personally, i...

This is a well written funny story. personally, i find that scenes like this make for good reads.

It seems that you go into details, then whisk everyone away under a torrent of events, very...
Forum: Fiction 08-06-2016, 01:40 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 552
Posted By Brett Nortje
Some of your ideas are good, especially for a...

Some of your ideas are good, especially for a sexually neutral audience. if you were to 'continue having dreams' and mixing them together, you could make a puzzle of dreams that all link up to real...
Forum: Fiction 06-16-2016, 02:05 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 663
Posted By Brett Nortje
Nothing wrong with this, superbly written. could...

Nothing wrong with this, superbly written. could not be better.
Forum: Fiction 02-16-2016, 01:03 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,083
Posted By Brett Nortje
it is a well constructed story, but you seem to...

it is a well constructed story, but you seem to be out of sync with the flickering of the language. it seems you have a nice sentence, then another nice sentence, then all of a sudden you make the...
Forum: Fiction 02-08-2016, 02:06 AM
Replies: 44
Views: 2,851
Posted By Brett Nortje
Well, i have only seen a few scripts, two with...

Well, i have only seen a few scripts, two with yours, and must say that it is quite well researched, as any person with a solid script might say.

Honestly though, it is in the hurry of holly wood...
Forum: Fiction 02-04-2016, 05:19 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 792
Posted By Brett Nortje
You know what? you would make a good poet, or,...

You know what? you would make a good poet, or, more financially, a song writer! you have a way with words when you 'break it up,' as as soon as i read that two short sentences followed by a long...
Forum: Fiction 01-24-2016, 12:24 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,456
Posted By Brett Nortje
I would say you are basically a professional...

I would say you are basically a professional writer.

Nothing bad to say.
Forum: Fiction 01-11-2016, 07:43 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 662
Posted By Brett Nortje
Well, if i may, i read all the big paragraphs. i...

Well, if i may, i read all the big paragraphs. i would like to say that it is a good story.

One thing you could work on is the length of your sentences. some are too short, then followed by ones...
Forum: Fiction 01-09-2016, 03:55 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 851
Posted By Brett Nortje
Original work. I found that the story had...

Original work.

I found that the story had bad grammar, but that doesn't always mean it is a bad story. remember, you want others to read your story, yes? this means you need to shock them in the...
Forum: Fiction 10-14-2015, 01:29 AM
Replies: 49
Views: 5,690
Posted By Brett Nortje
This is the most original story i have ever heard...

This is the most original story i have ever heard of. full of imagination and unique descriptions, of course.

One thing that was a little lacking was the tempo, as, there was a long description in...
Forum: Fiction 12-25-2014, 10:55 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
* Strip poker at club Trinity. * Delieah was...

* Strip poker at club Trinity. *

Delieah was out for quick cash, as usual, and was wandering around the poker section of the club looking for soft targets. they were all euphroic due to Christmas...
Forum: Fiction 12-24-2014, 01:34 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
Oh man, that is a good idea, i have just been...

Oh man, that is a good idea, i have just been pouring random things onto paper. i have no attention span.
Forum: Fiction 12-23-2014, 03:21 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
It is like random snap shots of their lives and...

It is like random snap shots of their lives and escapades.
Forum: Poetry 12-23-2014, 09:45 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 561
Posted By Brett Nortje
Where are you going? i liked the second verse the...

Where are you going? i liked the second verse the most, as, it was very catchy. it was catchy because it had a lot of syllables, and, had a theme to it, that, was drumming words in, but at the same...
Forum: Fiction 12-23-2014, 09:39 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
What is a "schema defficiency?"

What is a "schema defficiency?"
Forum: Fiction 12-23-2014, 08:52 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
Game of thrones has a lot of options available...

Game of thrones has a lot of options available for people to choose from, houses to join. the people with chairs seldom look for other houses.

I was hoping for some enemies for them, other imbued....
Forum: Fiction 12-23-2014, 07:36 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
Stylist. [23 lines, more rhetoric.]

Methusala was bored. he had the night before been playing with the spirits and candles, dice and eggs, and had found to his amazement that he was now endowed with magical powers. there were always...
Forum: Poetry 12-23-2014, 05:38 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 718
Posted By Brett Nortje
Life of Brett so far... [30 lines]

Once upon a time in place called cape town there lived a person with utter disrenown, he did not accept the way things were but had some good points that for sure;

It came to pass that he took all...
Forum: Fiction 12-22-2014, 02:28 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
Well, i could make it funny... and innocent......

Well, i could make it funny... and innocent... but, that is not something i enjoy wiring about. i mean, a chastity belt is funny, but whips are, well, boring, if they are handled in a way that is...
Forum: Fiction 12-22-2014, 12:56 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
But, this is an introduction to the messed up...

But, this is an introduction to the messed up people of the world for mid teens, as they are inquisitive and want to know. if i make sex not so serious, a game if you will, they will not try to rape...
Forum: Fiction 12-22-2014, 11:40 AM
Replies: 32
Views: 2,863
Posted By Brett Nortje
It is 'insanely emotional,' being really hurt,...

It is 'insanely emotional,' being really hurt, then letting it go, and teasing right back, and this is not an adult book.
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