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Forum: Fiction 01-16-2011, 08:49 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 661
Posted By 999raffica
A Short Prologue

Miles groaned as Len gripped the back of his neck, lifted his head, then smashed it back down onto the hood. Blood splattered across the clean, black paint job, and Crane winced, then sucked air...
Forum: Fiction 12-08-2010, 04:58 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 834
Posted By 999raffica
Behind the bush, Macy coiled back on her haunches...

Behind the bush, Macy coiled back on her haunches and trembled as adrenaline pounded through her veins. The killer was in search mode now, slowly creeping along the middle of the road, sweeping his...
Forum: Fiction 12-07-2010, 01:27 PM
Replies: 13
Views: 1,288
Posted By 999raffica
Holy balls, homeskillet. I did not expect this to...

Holy balls, homeskillet. I did not expect this to be that good. And you're only in high school? You can tell your English teachers to suck it (although I'm sure that you, being talented at writing,...
Forum: Fiction 12-05-2010, 07:57 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 834
Posted By 999raffica
Edit: I tweaked it again. My girlfriend and...

Edit: I tweaked it again. My girlfriend and someone on the forums pointed out that I was structuring almost all of my sentences the same way, so I'm just now teaching myself to structure them...
Forum: Fiction 12-05-2010, 01:56 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 834
Posted By 999raffica
Action exercise

I've been super obsessed with writing action lately. I don't know if I want to write thrillers, should I ever get to that point (do non-thriller books with this kind of action exist?), but I love...
Forum: Fiction 12-02-2010, 10:30 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,611
Posted By 999raffica
Thank you for the constructive criticism. I did...

Thank you for the constructive criticism. I did use "he" way too many times. My friend just pointed out that my sentences are too short, and after I nursed a bruise on my ego for a few minutes, I...
Forum: The Library 12-02-2010, 04:31 PM
Replies: 0
Views: 804
Posted By 999raffica
Thrillers

I've been working a lot on my writing lately -- i.e. actually taking it seriously for once -- and I've realized that I'm a lot more interested in writing commercial fiction rather than literary. And...
Forum: Fiction 12-01-2010, 03:41 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,611
Posted By 999raffica
Thanksamundo! And yes, an M4 would be difficult...

Thanksamundo! And yes, an M4 would be difficult to get for a civilian. No reason to save face: I completely didn't remember that. I used to be a gun nut, so that's even worse. I originally said M16,...
Forum: Fiction 12-01-2010, 01:43 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 1,611
Posted By 999raffica
An 815 word thing. I guess it's a short story

(The first paragraph and line was an exercise for moving characters around, but I just kinda kept writing. Like I said, I guess it's kind of a short story? Can't be sure. I may go back and add more...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-27-2010, 09:30 PM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,917
Posted By 999raffica
So in: "I don't know," he said. "I haven't...

So in:

"I don't know," he said. "I haven't seen him." Lawrence shook the hair out of his eyes and squinted down at me. "You could check at the Shady Lanes Inn. I've heard him talk about it...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-27-2010, 10:56 AM
Replies: 18
Views: 2,917
Posted By 999raffica
Icon9 Help! I don't understand scenes!

Up until recently, I had no interest in writing fiction. Most of my writing thus far has been essays, opinion, and first-person vignettes from my life a la David Sedaris, but I'm sick and tired of...
Forum: Free Writing 10-26-2010, 09:13 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 708
Posted By 999raffica
I really like this. The only criticism I can...

I really like this. The only criticism I can possibly think of is the lack of any introduction of who "she" is at the beginning. I understand that this was probably your intention, but it feels as...
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-26-2010, 08:44 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,442
Posted By 999raffica
I don't think there's anything wrong with it....

I don't think there's anything wrong with it. It's actually pretty neat, and I doubt I would have noticed in the first place. I think Cormack McCarthy does it in No Country.
Forum: Poetry 10-26-2010, 07:05 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 1,019
Posted By 999raffica
Your imagery is very good. I really like the...

Your imagery is very good. I really like the line, "What is lost I have only empty hands". The only part that eats at me is the "someone" in the last line. I feel like you should use an artsy-er word.
Forum: The Notice Board 10-26-2010, 07:03 PM
Replies: 32
Views: 15,516
Posted By 999raffica
As someone who can't drink coffee I am...

As someone who can't drink coffee I am monumentally offended by your neglect of tea-drinking smilies.
Forum: The Notice Board 10-26-2010, 07:01 PM
Replies: 164
Views: 48,078
Posted By 999raffica
I can't tell you how many eBooks I've tried to...

I can't tell you how many eBooks I've tried to read on my PC and just given up. I'd rather pay $15 for a paperback than read an eBook for free. On my desktop, anyway.
Forum: Members' Choice 10-26-2010, 05:06 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 12,099
Posted By 999raffica
I liked it.

I liked it.
Forum: Tips & Advice 10-25-2010, 10:21 AM
Replies: 20
Views: 3,588
Posted By 999raffica
I've also heard great things about "The Chicago...

I've also heard great things about "The Chicago Manual of Style". Has anyone else heard of it?
Forum: Writing Help & Issues 10-25-2010, 05:55 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 1,394
Posted By 999raffica
I think having a mentor would be extremely...

I think having a mentor would be extremely valuable. It would allow you to ask specific questions about what you're struggling with so you don't have to desperately comb through websites and books...
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