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Forum: Introductions 11-19-2016, 01:31 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 2,838
Posted By Krisjuljen
Hi brianpatrick, I'm Catherineage12's writing...

Hi brianpatrick,
I'm Catherineage12's writing tutor. I will let her know that your intentions were all in fun when I see her next.:)
Forum: Fiction 08-30-2015, 06:46 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 887
Posted By Krisjuljen
It was originally written for a children's...

It was originally written for a children's magazine, on their site. There was no option for lines. The story was cut and pasted on this site.
Forum: Fiction 08-30-2015, 06:40 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 887
Posted By Krisjuljen
Sorry, you guys. I'm a writing coach and I have...

Sorry, you guys. I'm a writing coach and I have posted a few stories from students on here, with their permission of course. I normally do state that it is a student's piece but must have forgot. In...
Forum: Fiction 08-30-2015, 06:34 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 887
Posted By Krisjuljen
No worries.

Hi Marc,
I'm not sure I know what you mean. I was complimenting you on your awareness that the style of writing (going off in all directions) is that of a sixth grader since the author is, in fact,...
Forum: Fiction 08-30-2015, 09:18 AM
Replies: 12
Views: 887
Posted By Krisjuljen
Wow, Marc...you are good. This story was actually...

Wow, Marc...you are good. This story was actually written by one of my students entering the sixth grade.:) I think she is extremely talented. She is also Chinese so English isn't even her native...
Forum: Fiction 08-28-2015, 11:58 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 887
Posted By Krisjuljen
Tonsillectomy

Most of the girls knew her as Bella, but every time I needed her to help me I called her Isabelle. And right now I really, really needed her to help me. There was one problem, however. Isabelle...
Forum: Fiction 02-20-2015, 03:50 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,142
Posted By Krisjuljen
Yes, Tao. I did receive a private message from...

Yes, Tao. I did receive a private message from one of the staff telling me it was okay to post my seventh grade student's work so I assume it is okay to post this fifth grader's work. I am a writing...
Forum: Poetry 02-19-2015, 07:22 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 515
Posted By Krisjuljen
Coastal Distance

Written by my fifth grade writing student, Angelina.

COASTAL DISTANCE

The waves crash against the shoreline
Sending rainbow sprays in the air
Churning in white foam
The receding blue wave...
Forum: Fiction 02-19-2015, 05:05 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,142
Posted By Krisjuljen
Written by fifth grade student

Hello fellow writers. I am a writng teacher/tutor. I previously posted one of my seventh grader's stories on here. When I see him again I will help him set up his own account. I have one more student...
Forum: Fiction 02-17-2015, 09:47 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,146
Posted By Krisjuljen
Thank you so much for the feedback, Elisa. I...

Thank you so much for the feedback, Elisa.
I wasn't sure how I should post his work. I have been apprehensive about sharing this forum with him because of some of the adult content. I am actually...
Forum: Writers' Cafe 02-14-2015, 07:50 AM
Replies: 10
Views: 2,099
Posted By Krisjuljen
I use this random generator with my writing...

I use this random generator with my writing students. They recently changed the site. Click on menu for a list of helpful generators. I especially like the lottery generator. It randomly selects...
Forum: Fiction 02-14-2015, 07:40 AM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,146
Posted By Krisjuljen
Thanks tremor, one of my seventh grade writing...

Thanks tremor, one of my seventh grade writing students wrote it. I'm trying to get him to understand the whole feedback thing.:)
Forum: Fiction 02-13-2015, 06:40 PM
Replies: 6
Views: 1,146
Posted By Krisjuljen
Slope Survival

The following piece is written by one of Krisjuljen 's grade seven students. Please post your comments accordingly. The goal here is to get the student use to the idea of receiving critiques.
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Forum: Fiction 12-21-2014, 09:36 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
Thanks Shelly, You're absolutely correct about...

Thanks Shelly,
You're absolutely correct about the comparisons��
I'm not her mom. I'm her writing tutor. Angelina is Chinese American so English isn't her native language, which makes me more...
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 07:17 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 675
Posted By Krisjuljen
The Peculiar Package

It was a perfectly normal day for John Leveras Marvesque - until the package arrived. He yawned and clambered out of bed at 7:00, sleepily nibbled a bit of his breakfast, and worked his way up half...
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 06:29 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
And... It's very difficult for me to accept...

And... It's very difficult for me to accept feedback from someone who says "you got" a lot of run on sentences!
Seriously??
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 06:26 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
Hi Shelly, I didn't help her with this piece...

Hi Shelly, I didn't help her with this piece because she had previously submitted it to a contest for young writers and had to attest it was her own work. Obviously there is room for improvement. I...
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 05:50 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
Where are the run ons? I believe she used some...

Where are the run ons? I believe she used some commas instead of semi colons
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 05:45 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
Thanks Writingfan27, My fifth grade student...

Thanks Writingfan27,
My fifth grade student wrote this. I just wanted to post on here to show her feedback. I'll let her know about run-ons.
Forum: Fiction 12-20-2014, 04:52 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,061
Posted By Krisjuljen
Birds of Beauty

Raven once was a proud bird colored white with blue and metallic streaks, with a voice like a silvery stream. He was known as a pretty bird, and he was prideful of himself and his feathers. Many...
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 08:16 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 319
Posted By Krisjuljen
Bansky

The silhouette of a little sister
greets the dark rain she’s hiding from.
Locked into the concrete, she looks up into
the silky nylon barrier.

Everything in her world
is either black or white...
Forum: Poetry 01-31-2014, 08:13 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 355
Posted By Krisjuljen
Thank you! My nineteen year old daughter wrote...

Thank you! My nineteen year old daughter wrote this for one of her English classes. I didn't know she could write. I'm going to post another.:)
Forum: Poetry 01-30-2014, 10:26 PM
Replies: 3
Views: 355
Posted By Krisjuljen
Vessel

Vessel

Between the flicker of poor lighting
and my constant blinking
much of what I remember was blinded
by the inside of my eyelids.
A room with long plastic covered benches
was all but...
Forum: Poetry 10-26-2013, 12:18 PM
Replies: 1
Views: 275
Posted By Krisjuljen
Revision...PLEASE..ideas for a title???

A face withered and worn from eternity
Radiating wisdom with the swaying of a transparent robe
Billowing in the evening breeze
With a thunderous but inexplicably calm voice,
God commanded,
“Oh,...
Forum: Poetry 10-20-2013, 02:17 PM
Replies: 2
Views: 268
Posted By Krisjuljen
Yes, thank you!

Yes, thank you!
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