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Forum: Poetry 08-10-2012, 06:35 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 416
Posted By 567ajt
Keliz, you said your style was one sided :P

Keliz, you said your style was one sided :P
Forum: Poetry 08-10-2012, 12:30 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 530
Posted By 567ajt
Thanks for your comment :) I tried writing this...

Thanks for your comment :) I tried writing this poem because I feel my stuff is samey and bland...maybe samey and bland is my thing I dunno XD
Forum: Poetry 08-08-2012, 04:35 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 401
Posted By 567ajt
Nice Dream...

I had a dream last night.
My enemies were smiling.
We were at one in peace.
My friends were calm as hindu cows,
and I was coming back.

We lived in the park.
Two girls greeted me,
hand in...
Forum: Poetry 08-04-2012, 08:08 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 530
Posted By 567ajt
Thanks for your comment :) It's me doing...

Thanks for your comment :) It's me doing something out of my comfort zone, i.e. writing a poem with parts, so it is a bit...well stop-start XD
Forum: Poetry 08-03-2012, 08:14 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 530
Posted By 567ajt
Observations Through Dented Glass

I
Where is that fragrance,
that used to haunt me?
Dissolved in the air?
Maybe it's still there.
Give me that sweet sound,
which drives me near.
Perhaps it's still there,
and I can't see where.
Forum: Fiction 06-07-2012, 01:21 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 487
Posted By 567ajt
Here is what I think of this extract: ...

Here is what I think of this extract:







^Nothingness
Forum: Poetry 05-29-2012, 09:25 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 315
Posted By 567ajt
Take Us To The Moors

The children suffer,
so take them to the moors.
They may as well leave.
Straight out the rundown door,
in the pits of shame.
They crawl slowly in time.
And no one will know,
for there's...
Forum: Poetry 05-15-2012, 11:03 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 420
Posted By 567ajt
The Fields Of Cambodia

It's year zero for you, pal
Off to the killing fields
There you'll be a primal slave
The Khmer Rouge will keep you
In check, once and for all and
You will not shake your head once
Once they cut...
Forum: Poetry 05-14-2012, 08:58 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 535
Posted By 567ajt
I, surprisingly, found this quite good. It's...

I, surprisingly, found this quite good. It's funny too. However, I don't know who you will make a second one.
Forum: Poetry 04-23-2012, 07:43 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 584
Posted By 567ajt
Ok. Let's- somehow, I don't know how to though-...

Ok. Let's- somehow, I don't know how to though- analyse this "poem". You've probably not got a review like this and nor will you get one like this again. Why? I mean, come on. Is it worth my time or...
Forum: Poetry 04-22-2012, 09:48 AM
Replies: 3
Views: 397
Posted By 567ajt
....wait, what?

....wait, what?
Forum: Poetry 04-20-2012, 06:56 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 426
Posted By 567ajt
Repetition Repetition Repetition

It's the sound of death.
Such an intense hum.
Is it even sound?
Or is it my mind?
As my mind repeats,
such drastic commands.

It's the one I love.
That cold click, again.
I want it to live,
Forum: Poetry 04-15-2012, 04:59 AM
Replies: 1
Views: 439
Posted By 567ajt
Dear Malice

So, malice.
Where to start?
The very word,
is unsettling.

Yes, malice.
It's cruel sound.
It's known pleasure,
spawns rejection.
Forum: Poetry 04-14-2012, 10:30 AM
Replies: 104
Views: 10,984
Posted By 567ajt
Jeez, there's a lot of venom in this thread. It's...

Jeez, there's a lot of venom in this thread. It's a poem! What else do you need? It doesn't matter what form, structure or themes are in it. I haven't been on the site for a long time, so this is the...
Forum: Poetry 04-12-2012, 04:09 AM
Replies: 5
Views: 734
Posted By 567ajt
Hi there! :) Apologies if this comment isn't...

Hi there! :) Apologies if this comment isn't going to help, because I have been on this site for ages :D

I liked your title. It felt conversational with it's use of the three dots. However, one...
Forum: Poetry 04-12-2012, 02:53 AM
Replies: 0
Views: 311
Posted By 567ajt
In Depth

The lost are found.
The homes are burnt.
Children, in dreams.
Eyes forever,
closed. Stopped.

I'm on the scene.
Scene of this crime.
Minorities,
bathing in flames.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 07-31-2011, 06:39 AM
Replies: 20
Views: 3,649
Posted By 567ajt
Leaving...kinda sucks.

Hi there. Some of you may remember my posts, in particular that abomination of a novel Pornography Kiss and that endless debate starting The Holy Bible. As you can judge by the title, I am leaving...
Forum: Non-Fiction 07-22-2011, 09:36 AM
Replies: 53
Views: 14,894
Posted By 567ajt
Well, did God have faith in me anyway? I gave...

Well, did God have faith in me anyway? I gave everything to Him. I made sure I did everything in order to make Him happy. But who is He? God may have made you a better person, but he didn't do...
Forum: Non-Fiction 07-19-2011, 10:46 PM
Replies: 53
Views: 14,894
Posted By 567ajt
I never said that in the first place. I am sorry...

I never said that in the first place. I am sorry if that seemed rude of me but yesterday I posted something very personal to me. You are right: religion is not art. But the problem I have, Mike C, is...
Forum: Non-Fiction 07-19-2011, 12:01 PM
Replies: 53
Views: 14,894
Posted By 567ajt
Even if I had a lot of knowledge of ALL the holy...

Even if I had a lot of knowledge of ALL the holy books, I still would have titled this piece 'The Holy Bible' and talked about the bible in particular because it is around me. It's influence is all...
Forum: The Library 07-19-2011, 08:03 AM
Replies: 3,739
Views: 298,663
Posted By 567ajt
William Burroughs- The Naked Lunch No...

William Burroughs- The Naked Lunch


No lol! It's the publishing company Penguin.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 07-19-2011, 06:56 AM
Replies: 22
Views: 2,097
Posted By 567ajt
I have posted chapter 2.

I have posted chapter 2.
Forum: Writers' Cafe 07-18-2011, 10:39 PM
Replies: 22
Views: 2,097
Posted By 567ajt
I'm not running away- I'm simply just spending...

I'm not running away- I'm simply just spending more time for my writing. I promise you: chapter 2 is not as vulgar or as "shock value" as the first chapter. I tink it develops the character, even if...
Forum: Fiction 07-18-2011, 12:27 PM
Replies: 10
Views: 1,403
Posted By 567ajt
You're a writer with Autism? I am too (Aspergers...

You're a writer with Autism? I am too (Aspergers syndrome). You really make what the character feels and says very real to what someone with autism would think. It is not too over the top, which is...
Forum: Fiction 07-18-2011, 11:52 AM
Replies: 2
Views: 766
Posted By 567ajt
Pornography Kiss (chapter 2)

2. Loneliness isnít a word

My morning was perfectly fine- the same sense of anxiety when I drink my apple juice, the overbearing sense of being stalked. I am used to the sight of a worried...
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