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Old 07-19-2010, 07:07 PM
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Originally Posted by That Kid Lee View Post
We triumphantly flare,
Into festive being.
I think this makes for a great metaphor and a great opening. I love the use of fire throughout the piece, makes for great emotion and vivid imagery.

And I absolutely love the last line:
Originally Posted by That Kid Lee View Post
We bow, and carry the torch away.
Vivid and brilliant. Have a cookie
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