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Old 07-29-2010, 04:18 AM
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This is really good, beautiful imagery and I liked many of the word choices. Only thing I didn't like was the punctuation, many line-end commas aren't necessary, and make me pause longer than the poem really needs. It broke the flow too much.

'I saw no God, nor heard any, in a finite organical perception; but my senses discover'd the infinite in every thing, ... I cared not for consequences but wrote.' -Blake
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