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Old 05-16-2018, 12:02 AM
IanG (Offline)
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The premise is interesting but so far we have only one viewpoint, that of the rulers. If you could give us the viewpoint of the oppressed and make one or some of them interesting characters then it would help. Perhaps this piece is too short to allow for that, but if ever you work it up into something longer then try to do that.

I like the way you convey the Master's patronising attitude. Many would find that just as chilling as crude aggression.
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