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Old 02-17-2015, 12:36 PM
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ok, the club, his parents run in Glasgow may be your out.

what kind of club is it, on a scale of 1-10 what kind of club is it---

one being need a tie to get inside and fifty buts to tip the doorman---

and

ten being the bar tender can set you up with a girl up stairs and a gram of cocaine can be bought on the way through the gambling den as you make your way to the room your 'date' is in.

experiences in the club as he grew-up could put a whole new layer to the personality or 'lack there of' to the onion that is our Mr. (Doctor) Phillips. These layers could take the form of being able to pick a lock, or being able to drink gallons of alcohol before he turns into some extreme version of Mr. HYDE.

I think Mr. Phillips could benefit from a dark side that comes out unexpectedly and maybe he doesn't remember anything that happens when he is on the dark side.

it doesn't have to be Mr. Hyde. it could be he's heavy into sneaking our at night and tagging (painting graffiti on sides of) buildings.

but he must have something else going for him besides Yvonne to make him more than two dimensional.

just my opinion,

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