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Old 06-14-2017, 10:46 AM
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Originally Posted by JP_Inkswell View Post
Dwayne, I think you need a character sketch or outline. What you have here reads like a plot which has many elements that could bring out the inner strengths and weaknesses of your character. Now you must define this young lady. I commend two things to your attention. Young women are often influenced by their fathers, or a father figure in their lives, and like such men, and all other humans, they often exhibit internal conflict that influences their behavior.

Mmmm, internal conflict.

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