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Old 07-11-2017, 03:29 AM
Rob56 (Offline)
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Try to make it simple. In this story there are too many things happen. Maybe you could just develop one story (show different aspects, more deeply) without mentioning the other. You can check my sources which helped me a lot with writing. Anyway, there is much going on and it's confusing.

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