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Old 09-07-2017, 07:06 AM
SecretDurham (Offline)
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Great potential, but all my concerns were voiced by other previous posters.

The start would hugely benefit from it being narrated, by who? That does not matter so much, who ever is narrating will no doubt turn up in the story soon enough.

Great scope, keep it up.

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