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Old 01-29-2007, 10:15 AM
Kriss Nichol (Offline)
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I think this will be a good story but the opening is all back story and could do with abit of pruning. If you start where it says 'Eric had been in Manhattan.....' it has much more impact and all the back story can be introduced in bite size pieces through dialogue or flashback. Krissxxx
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