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Old 03-17-2018, 10:22 AM
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That line is famous for how terrible it is. Most contests use it to try and find the best worst example of purple prose. Yours was a bit purple, but not much.

My suggestion, would be to have more fun with this paragraph. Get eloquently ridiculous as it were.
If it's worth the time its worth the risk -

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