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Old 03-17-2018, 10:22 AM
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That line is famous for how terrible it is. Most contests use it to try and find the best worst example of purple prose. Yours was a bit purple, but not much.

My suggestion, would be to have more fun with this paragraph. Get eloquently ridiculous as it were.
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