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Old 07-11-2011, 01:36 PM
KBR (Offline)
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I loved the way it slowed down at the end. It went perfectly with the change in mood. I'm ok with imperfect rhyme. Perfect rhyme is a task master. Perfect meter makes you read a poem like you have a conductor's baton in your hand. Unless you state the key and meter of the poem to the left of the first line like music notation, I prefer a looser approach.

This poem tickled me as well. There's an every woman quality to the read. Just to help ongoing male and female communications...the chores aren't as important. KBR
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