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Old 09-03-2017, 03:19 PM
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Bravo, I must say! that was well written. Plot wise I don't think that Kenner and Jessup are working together. My thoughts were that Jessup was a Physcopath (Not necessarily the murdering kind yet, just able to manipulate people and pull of emotions easily.) Kenner has picked up on this, and thinks it is odd. I'm no Dr. Phil, but Kenner seems to be mildly Sociopathic. Perhaps the death of a certain character would create somewhere to go?


Grammar wise, and punctuation, 2nd part, 38th paragraph, "My name is keely" Keely isn't capitalized.
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