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Old 09-27-2015, 08:09 PM
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Creative. Definitely an interesting concept. I didn't like all the cursing. And I think it's a bit rushed. Too much telling not enough showing. Although it aided the confusion of the main character that you seemed to be shooting for. I think it's got potential to be expanded. Hope this helps.

Ensign Commander Cantor Kalmik. SS Intrepid.

(PS.

If you don't mind my asking why IZA? Z's an uncommon letter in our Alphabet.
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