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Old 07-10-2017, 04:45 AM
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Nick, sorry. I've got strong associations with you and Vietnam - so I was trying to understand this piece from the perspective of a 'nam American soldier.

Thanks for the links - all helpful and interesting.

I like the way you've set this out - but I don't like the end part.

I go through this, feeling privileged that you're sharing a story with me. When you start musin' to yourself, there's an instant disconnection with your reader - you're not talking to me anymore, you're just talking to yourself. It's like you've 'walked away' on paper.

Honestly? I'm not sure if I like it or not. Leave it to settle for a few days and have another read. x
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