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Old 08-04-2018, 07:41 AM
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For example: It was a dark and stormy night.
becomes: Sudden lightening illuminated dark clouds in a dark sky. Fat raindrops began to pelt the window.

Ouch. Ok, playing devil's advocate, how is the MC not aware that it is a dark and stormy night. Are people so clueless so as not to realise without the aid of authorial intrusion what the hell the weather is? Are they inane morons?

Questions that sounded a lot harsher than intended, but still interesting.
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