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Old 03-29-2017, 08:06 AM
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Default My Relationship with Death

Very successful Personification of "Death" here.

The strong, active voice allows for a more brilliant personification. We know that Death has taken on a full body presence and can think and act as we do. Yet this character is in conflict with the Narrator for being less aggressive. Hmm, very clear femininity.

So, this draft executes characterization and voice. The audience will eventually turn the less aggressive character into a round character. I really like what you are doing with the shape of the story, a guest is being invited in a place like the Stranger-Comes-to-Town, but is in hesitation.

If you are going to use the title, "A Correspondence with Death," you should spend a little more time with plot and subplot. Set up some scenes and let us see Death avoiding situations.
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