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Old 12-19-2008, 11:14 PM
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Greatly appreciated. The line "That was three years ago" actually was added from the original. Several people mentioned that they felt that the shifting back and forth between the past and persent wasn't clear enougbh. So to combat this, I put the rather blunt line in to make sure that people understood that the deaths were not necessarily recent, though somewhat forever recent in the MC's mind.

I appreciate your read and comments!
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