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Old 08-09-2018, 04:16 PM
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Yes agreed. That or imbue the stream of conciousness with the dog attribute

You do well with the smell, but hearing as well could be incorporated. The dialogue is good, just the spaces in between need to be filled in with the consciousness to maoe it merge,

Hope that makes sense and maybe helps
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