Originally Posted by Delmar Cooper
Riven from the precipice, the flint far fallen
is softly bathed by the stream
I like this part very much! Ri-VEN, preCIpice, FLint FAR FAH-Len, soFTLy baTHed, sTReam...these are poetic effects I honor and seek myself.
I also like your final stanza, though I still need to figure it out!
: = )
P.S. I might position the adjectives ahead of the noun: ...the far-fallen flint....