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Old 11-22-2016, 10:13 PM
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Default These difficult children


I've given you
these difficult children and
what you've done is make
them feel home here
with perfect
pearly white stones in their pockets to finger when
things they knew
are no longer so—
your Christ in the middle at
the center of it
bleeding while a tiny liturgy
of hope I don't believe in
(and they one day won't need)
gives them wings

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Old 11-28-2016, 06:38 AM
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Trying some poemification, I see.

Wondering who the narrator is, maybe God or wrc, if I'm catching your drift.

If so, I like the sentiment, but there's not much going on with the structure or word choices etc.

But I am curious about "your Christ in the middle..."

Thanks for the read.
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Old 11-28-2016, 11:13 AM
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'Your Christ in the middle'

The thieves myers the thieves!
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Old 11-28-2016, 12:55 PM
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Hmm yeah. On the cross. Maybe...
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No, no, nothing so poetic😀

The white beads with Christ in the middle are rosary beads.
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Whohoah we got ourselves a Catholic here
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I was raised Catholic -- "stones" threw me off, I think, as opposed to beads.

I thought they were like metaphorical worry stones. Still might not have gotten "Christ in the middle."
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