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Me! Me! Me! (a poem from the 1st world)

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On some pasture where
adversity withered
grew these post modern feelings
of nihilism and meh

For our contentment
which is conspicuous consumption
which is for only a few
we need eleven or so planets

For our satisfaction
we need total control
in some era of boredom
the inconsequential is exigent

That backlight is less fuzzy now
and we are more separate
low battery is our despair
in the abundance of bread

though waves of our advances
build and destroy evenly
the dangers of birth
for mother and child are no more

We cannot complain of plagues
or of toiling on feudal lands
or great walls
or the latest emperor’s latest project

matters of the spirit
for us are not enforced by decree
and most of our Gods
dance across the TV

Yet in our wealth of freedom
bounty of comfort
treasury of privilege
this 21st century ego refuses us rest

Me! Me! Me! It cries.

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Tis a nitty gritty subject you have taken on here. There is a book out, I believe the Title is Longing for Less in a Culture of More. I have a copy, but haven't found time to read it.

My gut reaction is that the last line needs more illustration. The anvil needs to ring a little louder when the hammer comes down. It's well written though, and I enjoyed it.
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Originally Posted by JP_Inkswell View Post
Tis a nitty gritty subject you have taken on here. There is a book out, I believe the Title is Longing for Less in a Culture of More. I have a copy, but haven't found time to read it.

My gut reaction is that the last line needs more illustration. The anvil needs to ring a little louder when the hammer comes down. It's well written though, and I enjoyed it.
Yet in our wealth of freedom
bounty of comfort
treasury of privilege
this 21st century ego refuses us rest

Me! Me! Me! It cries.

I made this alteration to the ending yesterday -- but yeah endings are always tricky I know exactly what you mean to end with something crushing. Thanks for reading.
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