Hey, IZA. Don't know if you're looking for a critique, or just getting something off your chest, but 'Curly' doesn't need to be capitalized and it's not clear who the dialogue is coming from.
And (it may just be how the formatting came through), the last two lines need spaces between them.
Other than that, yeah, Memorial Day is just a party for most people. You ever see that video of a highway in Israel on their memorial day? They remember.
Mr. Ed said I should use his signature, since he's not anymore. In honor of his good friend Nok, here it is: "As far as smoking a cigar," she said, "I'd not know where to start or how to start." "It's simple," said I, "You light one end and chew on the other and hope to meet in the middle."
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