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Old 05-21-2007, 01:37 AM
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the dance of mind

round they go the dancers evermore
each step a step to nevermore

One step for the dance
One step for the sane
One step for the chance
One step for the pain
One step for the dance

round they go the dancers evermore
under endless forest, growing on forevermore
dancing along the pebbled path, each gem a falling star
each dancers step striding through the emerald meadow
trough field yellow as sun, on across the earth oh so far
passing by each tree on the endless dance of shadow
each step a step to nevermore

round and round they twirl
foot for foot, arm in arm
locked in swing and whirl
dancing under spell or charm

round they go the dancers evermore
each step a step to nevermore

One step for the dance
One step for the reign
One step for the chance
One step for the pain
One step for the dance

round they go the dancers evermore
over endless river, flowing on forevermore
dancing along the sandy path, each grain a falling star
each dancers step striding through the crystal streams
over lake blue as sky, on across the ocean oh so far
passing by each shore on the endless dance of dreams
each step a step to nevermore

round and round they twirl
pace for pace, hand in hand
locked in turn and whirl
dancing over wave and sand

round they go the dancers evermore
each step a step to nevermore

One step for the dance
One step for the feign
One step for the chance
One step for the pain
One step for the dance

round they go the dancers evermore
along endless sky, blowing on forevermore
dancing along the clouded path, each shimmer a falling star
each dancers step striding through the sapphire light
over moon white as bone, on across the heaven oh so far
passing by each tear on the endless dance of flight
each step a step to nevermore

round and round they twirl
heart for heart, mind in mind
locked in turn and whirl
dancing along deaf and blind

round they go the dancers evermore
each step a step forevermore
a step to nevermore

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The poem has rhythm and it has a beat.
This poem feels like it would have done nicely in the lyrics section

Also when you don't put a , at the end of a sentence then it means a Capital for the beginning of the next line.
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Originally Posted by BreezyWriter View Post
The poem has rhythm and it has a beat.
This poem feels like it would have done nicely in the lyrics section
I am not good with lyrics; I don’t really listen to music either. But you are right it does have a ring to it.

Originally Posted by BreezyWriter View Post
Also when you don't put a , at the end of a sentence then it means a Capital for the beginning of the next line.
I know my grammar is bad, the reason why I did not capitalise each new line is that I only wanted the ‘One’ to be capitalised. To emphasise the steps.
I am glad you liked it.


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