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Old 09-15-2016, 10:25 AM
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Irresistibly seductive forgiveness for sins uncommitted,
is the hand that not only helps but debilitate as well.

Unneeded care is a drug fostering acceptance of control.
velvet softness turns the heart away from daily struggles.

Challenges, how ever attainable become mountains of effort,
Far and away out of the mental reach of the overprotected.

The fault of others becomes the burden of the cared for.
Whose fault, is a question that is meaningless to the result.


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Old 09-16-2016, 01:09 PM
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Just one less comma and one more comma is all I can gather...


"Irresistibly seductive forgiveness for sins uncommitted,
is the hand that not only helps but debilitates, as well"

"Challenges, how ever attainable become mountains of effort,
Far and away out of the mental reach of the overprotected."
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Old 09-17-2016, 04:34 AM
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NuNu,

Thanks for the correction - punctuation is not a strong point for me but makes a huge difference.
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Old 10-28-2016, 03:06 AM
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I swear! Punctuation rules are hard to remember.
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Old 10-28-2016, 04:43 AM
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They are. It is a sign of the times. I'm a prime example.
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