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Old 06-13-2016, 07:19 AM
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WHERE OLD POETS GO



When the white moon settles in the southern sky
and loves leaves fall gently and dead upon the ancient Earth,
Ivory white pedestals will spring up in the fields and open places,
at night elvish creatures will come to stand upon them
and search the heavens with large and alien eyes.


These are the old poets, ghostly and motionless mostly
they cock distended ears to the distant music of unseen spheres.
The words they choose connect a thousand worlds, and yet
rarely reach the surface of any, and can only be found
in faded volumes on dusty shelves in dingy bookstores
on the corner, where you turn towards the factory side of town.


From away and beyond the guarded gates of Shangri La
they stitch and weld the world with words and hopes and dreams
formed from the fires of vast creation and hammered home to fragile life
then cast upon us as beams of light that slip between our frozen fingers
and shatter, leaving us gazing up from below.

And now you know gentle reader,
when the elders are not here to hear you,
where it is old poets go.

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Old 06-14-2016, 07:54 AM
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This made me smile. It reads very purple and flowery but that works with the subject matter so its a good thing here.

One line caught my attention -

rarely reach the surface of any, and can only found
Shouldnt there be a "be" before "found"? I'm no poet so I'm not sure if that was deliberate for rhythm/flow/rhyme etc, but to me it reads like a mistake.
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Indeed so. It's a genuine typo, now corrected. Thanks for the response.
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