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Old 05-26-2016, 07:48 AM
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The girl from France, the angelic chic.
French, and a mon amour, the delicate girl
French braided and Parisian love induced.
Who gave croissants of her appeal indeed
The girl from Toulouse, the girl from Nice.
The girl who dazzled the eye of a curious me
I saw the Parisian girl from a distant eye.
And the smell of her Coco Chanel perfume divine
I see the girl from France, her indefinite style.
was the girl from the place of the city of lights
She was Paris, and I a towering light.

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Old 05-26-2016, 08:55 AM
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very chic
liked the first line
and the atmosphere you have created here
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this one looks like it's from a book. probably not long enough, so i'll continue, i have to say: it's look-a-like-abook-a. so, you can't actually post that often? i still need critts for a book, so yeah, i'll stay nice. EDlT: that's my crit, that's all i'll have to say.
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It's not from a book, I wrote it silly I wrote it here in Ethiopia Addis Ababa lol
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this was inspired from your persona-lity. it's a poem, go on.. haha, give it a look-see.

"Whimsical to fail,
but venturesome.
Trust is roses.

Truth is so finite."
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