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Thank you to both of our entrants this time around for their submissions. Please keep entering the contests. We enjoy reading the works.

Congrats to Cuchulain with the cautionary essay on Bipolar Disorder.

Cuchulain 14.375
jazen 12.75



Originally Posted by BreezyWriter View Post
Member: Cuchulain
Title:
Bipolar Disorder
Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 8/10
Comments: Interesting use in the first person. Interesting wording, helping in making the whole story believable.
Score: 16/20
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Member: jazen
Title: Water

Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 4/5
Overall Impression: 9/10
Comments: Short, yet very interestingly informative.
Score: 17/20
Originally Posted by cuteangel View Post
Member: Cuchulain
Title: Bipolar Disorder: A Cautionary Essay

Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 7.5/10
Comments: Ever heard of stream of consciousness, Cuchulain? This entry was entirely that. Good flow of thoughts – however random they were, the piece turned out good in the end. Which, of course, was the best part. Mostly flawless, technically and as for the tone, it was fairly easy to follow.
Score: 15/20

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Member: jazen
Title: Water

Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 3/5
Overall Impression: 6/10
Comments: This entry was definitely different, but I’m not sure it worked for me. There were a lot of ‘dropped’ letters which were probably missed by your spell checker. Besides this, the tone was too much like a textbook entry. Overall, this could have been much better.

Score: 12/20

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Originally Posted by aprilrain View Post
Member: Cuchulain
Title: Bipolar Disorder: A Cautionary Essay

Mechanics: 4/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 7/10
Comments: Definitely a different piece. I wasn't sure how to feel about it after reading it, because I think you have some good thoughts here, and I see some of the ties you are making with your reference to The Fight Club. Yet I felt unsatisfied with the jumpiness.
Score: 14.5/20

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Member: jazen
Title: Water

Mechanics: 3.5/5
Intangibles: 3.5/5
Overall Impression: 6/10
Comments: This sounds like an informative piece you might write for a school report. If that is what this is intended for, then you have a good basis. However, for a more general audience, you might want to spice it up. Keep writing!

Score: 13/20
Originally Posted by Cordatus View Post
Member: Cuchulain
Title: Bipolar Disorder: A Cautionary Essay

Mechanics: 3/5
Intangibles: 3/5
Overall Impression: 6/10

Comments: I had to re-read parts because they were mostly incoherent. Try to reorganize your thoughts while keeping the same general theme.

Score: 12/20

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Member: jazen
Title: Water

Mechanics: 2/5
Intangibles: 2/5
Overall Impression: 5/10

Comments: The style is largely monotonous, and the information mentioned could work for a simple scientific report. Try to write about how water affects your life - bring something of your own personality to whatever you write.

Score: 9/20

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