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Old 07-02-2017, 06:36 PM
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Old 07-20-2017, 12:45 PM
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Why the text block?
Through the smoke and fog there comes a form ... shape shifting ... could this be the Future?
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Old 07-25-2017, 03:11 AM
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There could be more suspense here. If you describe people emerging from a cave in a state of terror or with injuries not normally sustained while caving, then bring in the dead girl later, that's much more intriguing than telling us about her so early.
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