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This is a story I had rolling in my head since 7th grade and started writing it the way I wanted in my sophomore year of high school (2003 - 2004). I'm not finished with it and last time I written this was October of '06. Right now want to go back to writing it now. Since this story is heavy with terms so I made a list of terms that make easy to follow the story:

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Terms
Techxer – A word for police apart of Atma. The word Techxer is really slang term. When Atma was founded police were called a ‘Technically enhanced police officer’. Then changed to ‘Techxer’ for short. Persons can be a techxer when they’re between the ages of 13-34. When a techxer reaches an age between their late 20s and 34 their ages physically regress back to their teen years. From time to time the regression can happen too early and regress back the preteen years. In a techxer’s lifetime age regression can happen nine times in their lifetime as a side effect from a techxer’s spark.

Sparks – Sparks are special powers techxers. Trainees go through extensive training physically, mentally, physiological training. If you don’t pass all three of these then you won’t be a Techxer. They ‘re eight sparks in Atma divided into elemental and non-elemental classes. Whatever spark a techxer gets is based on their personality, however that’s only a myth. Techxers are given sparks at random. A techxer can materialize the element of their spark from any part of there body. With a thunder, fire and light spark you can turn yourself in lightning, fire or light. All sparks can but Ice, Earth and Matter Alter can lunch projectiles. Using your spark extensively can be draining on you but you still have a lot in reserve. If you drain that however you will end up killing yourself when your pupils dilate and your heart implodes! Sparks have a shell life of an estimated 190 years this can even extend the life of the techxer. Once the spark deteriorates the techxers powers are gone and the techxer will age as regularly as any mere mortal.

Spark charging – charging is way of turning your spark on. It charges by a techxer’s growing adrenaline, sense of alertness, hostility or aggression. Charging is noticeable when a techxer’s eyes glow instantly and go back to normal. The color depends on their sparks.

Elemental absorption – absorption is when a Techxer absorbs their spark element from wherever they can find it. The only exception is solid matter sparks and Matter Alter. Your spark energy can be regenerated over time without any absorbing at all.

Elemental Combustion – If a techxer absorbs too much of their spark their materialize into that spark and explode!

Elemental Sparks:

1). Ice – controls Ice. Make ice cold enough to be harder than steel. Forms dry ice. Form ice around you as a shield and turn it into any shape.

2). Fire – Controls Fire

3). Thunder – Controls Thunder

4). Water - Controls water

5). Earth – Ditto as ice

6). Plasma – Controls light and Plasma

Non-Elemental Sparks:

7). Atom Splitter – Form explosions big or small. This is primarily a projection spark.

8). Matter Alter – Control time and space, make yourself, anything and anyone around you faster or slower. You could shift or manipulate matter. This spark is incredibly unpredictable. Some techxers know how to use this spark better than others

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Here's the introduction to the story:

Modera, a land similar to ours has finally united after hundreds of years of feudal civil wars between the eastern and western regions of the land. However the peace has now been once again shattered by a group of religious zealots/terrorists known as The Nexus. Spreading their beliefs with terror and destruction throughout Modera. Saying there bringing forth bless and rapture. Yet not everyone knows who or what they are. Even with a new kind of police force with the ability to use elemental powers known as Atma, might not be able to solve the problem, but there are some in Atma that go over and the above the system to stand up to this unusual menace. Here begins the journey of the seven in the Grand Atma.

I'll post the first chapter later today. Tell me what you think...

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From the introduction it sounds quite interesting. However, I don't think you need to have a list of terms for your readers (even if it's just we humble ones here) since we can glean them from the context they're in. If the story is presented in such a way where these things, their meanings and purposes are hinted at, we wouldn't need a 'spoon-feeding' beforehand; explanations will just come through.

But, like I said, from the introduction it does sound interesting. Post the first chapter and see what opinions come back to you. You might be pleasantly surprised.
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I wanted to post the first three chapters instead of just one so you get the looks of the first main characters. The whole story I written in a psudeo-script form so it would be easy for me to write and easy for anyone to read. Any of the character's lines that are in italics mean that it's a character's thought and not something they've said out loud. Some spots in the story say "(Insert fight scene here.)" since the fight scenes slowed me down in writing the story. I hope no one has problem with the way it's written, enjoy!

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Chapter 1
Aug. 15th
9:15 A.M
Portiis

The scene starts out in a clear, sunny and beautiful morning, in a crowded marketplace of the semi-back water town of Portiis in Western Modera.

Walking though the busy street is a boy about 17 years old with a slightly pale compilation with a thin but normal build, sandy blond hair with traces of brown and solid blue eyes. Wearing a black leather jacket, long white t-shirt, regular black jeans (not baggy) and plain all white sneakers.

He accidentally knocks down a little girl who was playing with a ball. She was about to cry.

The boy sighs, picks up the ball and gives it to the girl.

Boy: (Mad) Here kid. Get up!

The girl gets up and wipes her tears.

A woman comes to her and picks her up. She looks at the boy with disgust.

Woman: (Yelling) Don’t talk to my daughter like that!

Boy: Look lady, I’m not good with kids.

Woman: Humph. (walks away)

The boy finally gets out of the marketplace.

Boy: (Sigh and thinks) Ok, that boarding school shouldn’t be to far. Just gotta keep going northeast.

The boy goes on his trial until a gang of five ends up in front of him.

Gang leader: Well, well, well, if it isn’t officer Grady.

Grady: (Sighs uneasy) Oh, great, these guys. I don’t want to deal with you guys.

Gang member: What are ya’ gonna do? Arrest us?

The whole gang laughs.

Grady: (Cringes teeth) Look! Get out of my way!

Gang member #2: (Joking) Ohhh! We’re so scared.

Grady: (Yelling) I said get out of my way!

Grady charges his spark.

(Insert fight scene here.)

At the end of the fight, the gang is on the ground in pain. All unconscious. Grady looks down at them.

Grady: Jackasses.

Grady finally makes it to his destination. In one of the rich neighborhoods in Portiis, A gigantic boarding school surrounded by a tall white stone gate. Grady himself couldn’t believe it. He pulled out his police radio from his pocket and turns it on.

Grady: This is Grady Anderson. Right in front of the boarding school, on Burbon St. I’m the first one here, over.

???: Hear ya loud and clear Anderson. Stay put ‘till the whole pack arrives.

Grady: (Sighs) Sure, Grady out.

Grady kneeled against the wall with his arms folded. He waited for ten minutes and nobody else came. He sighed and turned his attention to the front of the boarding school. He saw looking through a window dozens of children walking single file out into what looks like the courtyard from his view. They were escorted by what looks like armed guards. He had a gut feeling something was going to happen. He pulls out his radio.

Grady: Anderson here. Something’s happening, I’m going in.

???: No Anderson! Wait for back up! Don’t go in there yet!

Grady: Too late I’m gone.

???: I said wait for backup! Are you listening to-

Grady cuts him off. He charges his ice spark and pulls out his handgun. He turns the gate into ice and shatters it with a single gunshot. When he gets to the front door he shoots at the knob a few times and kicks the door open.

END OF CHAPTER…

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Chapter 2
Aug 15th
9:45 AM
Burbon St. Boarding school

When Grady came into the school he saw soldiers dressed in odd gray uniforms. (Note: They’re like gray uniforms that you might see mechanics wear.) These soldiers are Nexus.

Trooper #1: Who the hell is that?

Trooper #2: It’s a Techxer.

Grady sees he’s surrounded and everyone has an assault rifle. Knowing they’re about to shoot, he covers himself with an ice shield.

Trooper #3: Kill him!

All the Troopers start firing at him crazy until everyone’s out of ammo.

Grady cracks and shatters the ice. Shards come at the troops, finishing them off.

Grady runs down a hall, trying to find his way to the courtyard. He then hears sounds from the children that they are in need of help. He goes to the direction where it’s coming from.

When he finds the sound it’s behind a door. He forces the door open and sees a few small frightened children inside.

Child #1: (Screaming) Ahhhhhhhh!!

Child #2: Please don’t hurt us!

Grady: Hey take it easy kid, I’m a Techxer.

Child #1: You mean you’re here to save us?

Grady: Yeah.

Child #2: There are other kids being brainwashed around here.

Grady: Where?

Child #2: I’m not really sure. I heard there are others in other rooms.

Grady: Thanks kid, I want you all to stay here! There’s gonna be a whole lotta crazy stuff around here and I don’t want any of you gettin’ hurt on me!

After going around the boarding school, looking for clues about what’s really going on here. Finally, Grady was able to get into the courtyard. (Note: At first, Grady couldn’t get to here.)

When he makes it to the center of the courtyard, there are dozens of children looking forward at him with pale white eyes standing in a few horizontal lines. With two women both with dark purple hair in Nexus-style robes, six heavily armed troops and one muscled out man standing in the middle. The soldier in the middle is over seven feet tall, long charcoal black hair, gray eyes, wearing a white tank top, his pants and boots were all Nexus issue.

Grady: (Points his gun at the tall guy) HOLD IT!

Everyone except the two women and children turns to face Grady.

Tall guy: So this is our intruder. Just a single techxer caused all this trouble?

Grady looks at the troopers and sees what they’re armed with.

Grady: (Thinking) What the hell did I get myself into? All of you are under arrest for kidnapping.

The tall guy laughs.

Tall guy: Just as I figured from you. Thinking of this as ‘kidnapping’ but is merely setting these poor young children free.

Grady: (Confused) W…What, ‘setting them free’?

Tall guy: (chuckles slightly) It’s hard for a closed-minded child like yourself to understand.

Grady: (Thinking and grunting) Who’s he callin’ close-minded?

Tall guy: (turns to the two women) Send them off!

The two women bow their heads slightly and use a teleportation spell on themselves and children.

Grady: (Shocked) Where’d they go!?

Tall guy: Oh, wouldn’t you like to know. (Pulls out two whips he has holstered on his belt.) Punish him!

The troops get ready to fight.

Grady charges his Ice spark.

(Insert fight scene here)

In the post-battle cut scene Grady fires his last clip on the tall guy. The tall guy moves slightly to dodge and whips Grady’s right hand knocking the gun out of his grip. The tall guy wraps his other whip around Grady’s waste and tosses him into the air. Throwing him into a small stone statue. Grady quickly gets up, ignoring the pain and does a Winter Breeze on both of the tall guy’s arms covering them with ice. But the tall guy shatters the ice by muscling out it. Grady runs at him. The tall guy whips at him. Grady dodges by jumping in the air. Grady forms and an ice spear and tries to stab the tall guy. The tall guy dodges but the spear cuts the side of his left cheek. The tall guy lashes Grady on the chest, ripping his t-shirt and knocking him down to the ground. The tall guy stomps on his chest knocking the wind out of him, pinning him down with his foot. He looks down at Grady smiling.

Tall Guy: Fighting you is like fighting a blind person.

The sound of a shotgun cocking is heard out of nowhere.

The tall guy was knocked down to ground by a net knocking him out.

Grady slowly gets up. He sees that the tall guy’s KO’d.

He turns to where the net came from. It was from a small Hispanic boy that looked too young to be a techxer. He is carrying the shotgun. With dark brown hair and brown eyes. Wearing a gray t-shirt, black shorts and black boots. He blows the smoke from the shotgun barrel.

Boy: (Hardly noticeable Spanish accent) Man, they were right. These net rounds worked like a charm. (Faces Grady) Hey! You ok?

Grady: (Faces the boy) Yeah I’m fine. (Squints at the boy) Are…You?

Boy: I know what you’re gonna say. Yeah, I’m a techxer. So you’re the guy that came busting into the school, solo?

Grady nods and covers his wound on his chest in pain.

Boy: You look hurt.

Grady: Ahh, it’s nothing. (Shakes head and walks out of the courtyard)

The boy follows him.

Boy: You should get that looked at. Hey my name’s Emmit!

End Of Chapter…

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Chapter 3
Aug 15th
Outside the boarding school
10:13 A.M.

The scene starts out with Grady sitting on the hood of a car with a paramedic treating his wounds.

Voice from a distance: Anderson! (Note: It’s the same voice from the police radio Grady was talking to.)

Grady turns to the voice. It came from a veteran techxer with the appearance of eighteen years old but was really in his late forties. He was walking with a limp and cane. Dark brown hair, with a beard, blue plaid shirt, kaki pants and brown dress shoes. His name is Shane Mortz and he was coming to Grady.

Mortz: (Screaming) Anderson! You hardheaded SOB! What part of ‘Wait for backup’ don’t you understand?

Grady: Look Commissioner, I saw something weird, thought it was big…

Mortz: Thought it was big? You just burst in there, raisin’ hell all over the place. Thank God none of those kids got hurt.

Grady: (Sighs frustrated) Can you let me finish?

Mortz: (Yelling) No! I’m not gonna let you finish. Why the hell should I? When I give you an order to follow and you don’t have enough goddamn sense to follow it! (Almost cracks his voice and coughs) Dammit, I’ll talk to you later; I’m already losing my voice because of you! (Walks off but turns back one second later) You know what! Don’t even come back to the station. I’m relieving your ass for today. (Finally walks off)

Grady: (Under his breath and shakes his head) Damn!

The paramedic finishes up with Grady.

Paramedic: Ok man, your ready to go.

Grady: (Silently) Thanks.

The paramedic leaves and Grady is about to put his t-shirt back on until he sees the hole in it left by the tall guy’s whip. He sighs in disgust.

Emmit: (From behind Grady) He was pissed, wasn’t he?

Grady turns around to face Emmit. He was surprised to him there.

Grady: Oh, it’s you. Yeah, he was. (Puts on his messed up t-shirt and jacket)

Emmit: They already took that big dude you fought down to the nearest station. Guess he’s being interrogated right now.

Grady: (Gets up from off the hood) That’s nice.

Grady acted like he was listening to Emmit but really wasn’t. He gets ready to walk off.

Emmit: Where you going?

Grady: Home. My Commissioner gave me the slip for today.

Emmit: Ok, sure. C’ya.

Grady: Yeah, you too. (Walks off)

End of Chapter…

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That's the first three chapters. What do you think?

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This looks more like a script than a piece of prose. How exactly do you see this? That is, people read dramatic plays for enjoyment, but most prefer a traditional narrative form. Just wondering if we should moveit to the scripts forum.
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Yes, I was thinking about that... and about agreeing with whoever suggested it... but since it's you, Q, I'll pass... I'm kidding.

But one thing here: I'm a bit of an American-Basher. Sort of like how Americans treat George Bush. Call me racist, call me anything... I'm not going to produce any insults, so no worries. But what exactly is the sophomore year? Call me dumb, call me stupid... but that just adds to a point I'm trying to avoid. Ah... don't worry.
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Sophomore year is generally the second year of secondary school, but I suppose it depends on whether they have a middle school or not. That is, Primary encompasses years 1 through 6; Middle School is years 7 through 9; and High School (equivalent to British secondary) is years 10 through 12.

But I went to a Primary school for 6 years, followed by a Grammer School that covered years 1 through 8; then secondary for years 9 through 12. In my school, the years were known as Freshman, Sophomore, Junior and Senior. But things change, so it could be different now.

And I do know you are from Down Under, not Britain, but I don't know the Australian equiavlents.

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Sophomore year is tenth grade in the States.

Sorry, I just realized that was short and irrelevant to the original post.

Well, I, too, saw this as a script and I know you said you've written it in script for to make it easier on you and those who read it. However, I felt cheated out on what could have been some interesting scenes written in prose. I enjoy description and character interaction in a story, but that's just me. (Obviously, or I wouldn't have said "I" at the beginning of the sentence. Lol) Anyway, you might fare better if you did write this out in prose form rather than script. Work to improve your writing (I know you mentioned you had trouble writing the fight scenes). The only way you're going to improve is to actually make yourself do it.

Now, I have to run. Sorry about this. I'll be back if I think of anything else to add.

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Well, thank you... considering I was about to launch into American-Bashing mode about how they think the world revolves around them and they are completely ignorant at times... but I'll let that pass:P.

Very nice, Q... and thanks as well, Dev.
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Sophomore year is generally the second year of secondary school, but I suppose it depends on whether they have a middle school or not. That is, Primary encompasses years 1 through 6; Middle School is years 7 through 9; and High School (equivalent to British secondary) is years 10 through 12.

But I went to a Primary school for 6 years, followed by a Grammer School that covered years 1 through 8; then secondary for years 9 through 12. In my school, the years were known as Freshman, Sophomore, Junior and Senior. But things change, so it could be different now.

And I do know you are from Down Under, not Britain, but I don't know the Australian equiavlents.

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That sounds seriously complicated, Queen! I went to a primary school when I was four, and had seven years there (called P1, P2, up to P7) and then had an exam called the "Eleven Plus". If you passed this, you could go to one of the grammar schools in the nearby city. If you didn't, you had to settle for an ordinary high-school. I was, unfortunately, in the latter half. I started high-school and did five years (called Year 1 through Year 5) and the end of which I graduated at the age of sixteen. I didn't go to college then, instead started on building sites with my father. Then, three years ago, I went back to college during night-time and got my degree and my A-Level in English.
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It's a slightly different number system in the States, is all really. And some systems break it down as years 1-6, 7-9, 10-12; while others go for 1-8, 9-12. And the State schools there are called Public schools, whereas here, the public schools are private....

It still amounts to 12 years in total, although by the time you get out of secondary there, you are usually 17-18, so slightly older than here. I was one of the youngest in my year and was 17 when I graduated and headed off to uni.

Do they still have the 11 Plus in Ireland? They got rid of it here, but I don't know when. Certainly it wasn't around when the Wolfling started school. But now she is out of the system entirely and I have trouble working out what year she would be in, if she were in school.
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Hmm, now that I think of it, the Eleven Plus has been done away with here too. It's a shame, in my opinion. I always thought it was a good system. Anyway, apologies for derailing your thread, Unknown_Hero!
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I knew some people would have a problem with the script form. I didn't want to post this in the script forum since it's not in a real script form and people would have a problem with it. If it's okay with anyone that I post this in the script forum?
I say if you're planning on keeping it in script form, then by all means, yes, go ahead and post it in the script forum. That should be fine. We could also move this thread for you, if you'd like.
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